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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
She said it was a complicated thing The way her life had been put together and the people she’d known As she clipped an ad for some wonder tonic that with all its claims for cure Would have explained away any hesitancy that either of us might have had In being able to fix anything that might go wrong Then pasted it to the page she had spread before here and held it down So it wouldn’t come loose should my fingers brush it She plucked a button from her blouse and picked the threads Looked at me as the gap spread and said she’d fasten the button here But later I could undo it if I wanted to change the view I wouldn’t be the first to look or touch what lay beneath the lace Or speak the words she might want to hear Even if she thought mine were just as cruel they seemed still To hold something tender but she wasn’t sure Picking an antique valentine she fit it to the page Then slipped inside the card an image she said would let me see How the words could leave the page if one wanted bad enough To share, or save, or could pretend that the syllables would Find the tender inner places we all hid from one another And didn’t mind so much it all wasn’t new When she had finished with her arrangement She tucked between the folds half notes written in pseudonyms Extolling a moment she imagined in time Then asked me to write my own so they could lie side by side A procreation of dreams that might abide saved as this So that if we ever thought to look back someday we could Remember how it never was as we touched layers of days And the tender glimpse of complicated skin |
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rosepetals36 Member
since 2010-07-09
Posts 137Pa |
I never know what to say when it is time to respond besides I liked it! This is why I don't respond alot lol. I did like it though  <b>-- Used to be rosepetals25 before I tried to change my email lol</b> |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) I like it works just fine... it's always nice to know someone read what you offered, and replies of any kind are always appreciated... so.. thank you.. |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
OMG!Sweet! I related to this in ways I hadn't expected...ebm |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
"When she had finished with her arrangement She tucked between the folds half notes written in pseudonyms Extolling a moment she imagined in time Then asked me to write my own so they could lie side by side A procreation of dreams that might abide saved as this So that if we ever thought to look back someday we could Remember how it never was as we touched layers of days And the tender glimpse of complicated skin" I especially loved this part. Such a treat to read your poems. ~Sunkissed |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
EBM... glad you found something in this to enjoy and that you could relate to as well.. you eyes are always appreciated ma'am |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sunkissed... many thanks for the nice words..glad you enjoyed.. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"I wouldn’t be the first to look or touch what lay beneath the lace Or speak the words she might want to hear Even if she thought mine were just as cruel they seemed still To hold something tender but she wasn’t sure" That is what I think is hitting the nail on the head. Nice write. JL |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you for the read..and your kind words... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Love the style... And I see layers, and it's not just a blouse. tenderly portrayed enjoyed |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
The more I read you the more I grow to appreciate your style and talent, Cpat. Ida |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ms Karen... many thanks for the look see...and the nice words ma'am |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ida, thank you..kind of you to say |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"So that if we ever thought to look back someday we could Remember how it never was as we touched layers of days And the tender glimpse of complicated skin" wow~ M |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ms M.... sometimes a ~wow~ is worth a thousand words... thank you |
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