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Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2010-06-14 07:12 PM

We all looked the same on this plane
On this field of dreams
We settle each otherÕs differences through the words
Of the birds that soar through the skyline

No names, no religions, no judgments
Just a hello,
A friendly exchange of old souls
Touching and smiling along the coast of the south
To the tips of the Appalachians.

On this plane, we fear no evil
We see no treason,
We are the shadows between each otherÕs feelings

It is not all for not, it is for a deep seeded reason,
To be with us, to be one, to never hold back from another stranger
Because here in the woods, in the farthest of corners,
We count on each other.

This plane we live on,
It is not forsaken,
It is not yours or mine, but it is everyoneÕs

Where we all look and feel the same
To be just like the pink trace of the skyline before the night approaches,
We become the surrealism of the stars
As the night rivers down our united, tired eyes.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2010-06-14 07:37 PM

It is not all for not, it is for a deep seeded reason,
To be with us, to be one, to never hold back from another stranger
Because here in the woods, in the farthest of corners,
We count on each other.

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That's such a great thought to ponder.
Nice message here~

SlowlyFallAway
Member

since 2008-08-29

Posts 279
North Carolina

2 posted 2010-06-14 10:29 PM

Almost sounds like Utopia. It's nice to read something positive every once in a while :-)

Enjoyed.

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

3 posted 2010-06-15 05:28 PM

Thanks for the responses.

Cheers

Tomer

Earl Brinkman
Senior Member

since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

4 posted 2010-06-15 09:05 PM

This certainly sounds like Utopia. I found the last stanza especially good.

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

5 posted 2010-06-15 10:33 PM

I like your clever, deliberate misspellings and your use of internal rhyme.. wonderful

~Amaryllis

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