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Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2010-06-14 11:29 AM

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Softly quietly
So imperceptibly
A way opens
And you are here

It is you

Being
Immanent evidence
Coming from
That other place
The one that matters
The one I know
By who I feel

How articulate
Are your silences

Sense beyond measure
Light time— sound
Reason or fear

Your gaze from
Taking in eternity
Nameless endless
Magnificent anonymous

And before you go
To where you will
Then wait for me

You turn around
And smile

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Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

1 posted 2010-06-14 11:36 AM

This gives me chills.. the good kind.. I love your writing!
~Amaryllis

Lamar Cole
Member

since 2009-05-01

Posts 274

2 posted 2010-06-14 04:05 PM

Nice.

SlowlyFallAway
Member

since 2008-08-29

Posts 279
North Carolina

3 posted 2010-06-15 03:17 AM

Awesome... I'm going to have to save this one.

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2010-06-15 07:09 AM

This is a fascinating piece Huan Yi. There are many angles this takes my mind, from glimpsing God, to glimpsing others who passed before us if only for a brief instant. Perhaps it's where my mind is right now reading my own desires into it, and wishing for the vision myself. I very much enjoyed pondering your words here.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2010-06-17 04:52 PM

Haunting and beautiful, John, Maybe your best.
Ida

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

6 posted 2010-06-17 06:03 PM

A beautiful poem. I do not know if you will rewrite it at all, which you might, but it is imho a worthy composition. Some buttons pushed for me are the "any progress along such a path leads to all freedom from fear" line from the BG, Michael Ende's Childlike Empress, and Mr. Blake's observation about the cleansed doors of perception. Good stuff.

Abuse of power
is pernicious slavery.
Defend against it.

Zeigeist
Member

since 2009-12-09

Posts 311
Michigan

7 posted 2010-06-17 09:40 PM

Just a awsome write John, just beautiful.

Zeitgeist.

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

8 posted 2010-06-18 08:02 AM

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Thank you

Glad so many like it

John

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