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Open Poetry #46

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crosscountry83
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since 2009-07-30

Posts 345

0 posted 2010-05-26 01:02 AM

It's been awhile, but school is over so I have a bit more free time now.

waves crash, then slide
along the vacant shore,
littered with broken shells
and broken dreams.
void of human presence,
storms life's obstacles
that hover for eternity,
casting their shady glow.
soft yet formidable darkness,
bullets of water are shed,
and only then does
redeeming sunlight gleam,
far on the horizon and masked
by heavy mist, but still.
the fluid hue is the
shifty will to survive

Earl Brinkman
Senior Member

since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

1 posted 2010-05-26 01:48 AM

The imagery of the piece is for the most part clear but a few points left me a little confused. Redeeming sunlight gleams for the shore? But is it all for nothing since a shifty hue is in control? I may not understand your poem completely but thank you for sharing it with me.

N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet
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since 2009-07-30

Posts 360
New Orleans

2 posted 2010-05-26 02:55 AM

Beautifully captured.

crosscountry83
Member

since 2009-07-30

Posts 345

3 posted 2010-05-26 11:53 AM

Thanks for the comments. I'm not entirely sure what it means either, so I might edit it later after I figure it out. I should probably figure out a title too, eventually.

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