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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

0 posted 2010-05-21 10:25 PM

Blade Dance

Perhaps the heaviness of winter bends the backs of native rye
Preferring to be gold in autumn, strength training in preparation
But then, the cold heart of winter melts, in a flood of emotion
The sprout of fenugreek and clover make a carpet lush and green
Barefoot advice to the weary tread of a long season’s journey
Perhaps these days I am more the wind than the spring sunshine
More the throaty whisper of seduction than the frilly skirt of innocence
Perhaps, I am more summer than I have told the sky in quite a while
If that is true, then follow with your eyes, the twirl of my blade dance
For spring brings the music that moves me in tune with the grass

Copyright Kkh 5/21/10

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2010-05-21 10:54 PM

Perhaps, I am more summer than I have told the sky in quite a while

Perhaps it is

Beautifully done, loved the entire piece - every word.

Bastet
Member

since 2010-05-07

Posts 246

2 posted 2010-05-22 01:49 AM

This is a wonderful poem that I really enjoyed reading. I find your comparing yourself to spring sunshine and summer original and evocative. I also like your conversation with the sky. Bravo!

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2010-05-22 07:21 AM

quote:
More the throaty whisper of seduction than the frilly skirt of innocence

An enthralling piece of poetry, dear TD!

Love,
Margherita

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2010-05-22 07:46 PM

A pleasure to read...James

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

5 posted 2010-05-22 09:30 PM

I enjoyed the imagery of springtime winds making the fields of rye stalks dance. That, and the bending of backs reference, gives the poem a bit of "Russian" feel.

Lamar Cole
Member

since 2009-05-01

Posts 274

6 posted 2010-05-23 01:17 PM

Very Nice.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

7 posted 2010-05-23 02:02 PM

Lovely, TD!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2010-05-23 04:47 PM

A scyth dance, indeed!

Lovely words, and especially enjoyed,

quote:
Perhaps these days I am more the wind than the spring sunshine
More the throaty whisper of seduction than the frilly skirt of innocence

Great imagery!

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