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When Two Become One
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When Two Become One |
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SlowlyFallAway Member
since 2008-08-29
Posts 279North Carolina |
In the beginning I had my doubts that he was just too good for me And with every day that passed the feeling grew a little stronger The motives looked a little clearer And my doubts sank in a little deeper But still I carried on, with this man much too good for me Until the night we gave it all away Beneath the roof of the only home I had ever known The stars seemed to collapse in his eyes And I could taste an angel's blood on his lips I never would have thought that night would change it all Four months later now I have my doubts that I am just too good for him And with every day that passes my emotions wear a little thin The truth becomes a bit more clear And the knife sinks in a little deeper But still I carry on, with this man not capable of being pleased Or pleasing me in return for my generous attempts, at least And each night I give him what's left of me Beneath the roof of the only home I will ever know My life seems to collapse before my eyes I can taste a coward's fear on my tongue And I think about how oblivious I must have been To never once stop and think about how that night would change it all Emily Shives May 15th Friday 2010 |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms slowfall.. the shoveling of empty into emptier is a hard task...perhaps in time you will see a light below the darkness and it will lead you out again.. |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
I think we all search for a 'clean love' that doesn't hurt more than it helps. Loves may match but souls don't always and vice versa. To have both at the same time is Nirvana. Jeff |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
This is so powerful it hurts. I want to know all of the story behind this one. Amazing. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Emily, This poem shows a lot of promise. I would try for a little more simplicity. Love Bobby |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
SlowlyFallAway - at times the truth only comes out when someone lets their guard down. And that usually comes when being together for a while... BC |
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