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God Makes a Flower
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God Makes a Flower |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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I ran across a writing prompt that said: You are God, make a flower. Here is my effort . . . From woman I take mysterious crevices And build from within I pluck from warm southern winds Evolving spirits and calming influences Molding clay comes next Merging within the framework has begun The deep crevices pulsate with expectation I surround this embryo with clear mountain dew To immortalize To nurture its beauty And satisfy its thirst As it begins to bud and flower I squeeze aroma from distant, foreign lands A pleasing scent to bestow joy and smiles A rod of thorns, sharp Blood spiller if mishandled I stand back Observe my creation Not quite satisfied Handling carefully I cup in my hands The burgundy and crimson hue Of aurora borealis Let it trickle from my palms Onto the folds and crevices A pleasing flush Or maybe a blush Ahh . . . I stand back still not satisfied And so I bend And christen thee with a kiss Bestowing upon thou a soul of your own And baptize thee . . . Rose ~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Absolutely Gorgeous! Made me remember a Rose I once knew. Gotta Love it Jerry! Lori |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
It's a lovely night for poetry.  I like the way you've arranged your petals--rather like observing someone observing the sacred.Lovely and charming. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Lori, methinks you very much, whew! Glad to be back. Thanks. <><><> You called it, serenity, that was exactly what I was doing. Thank you for being here. ~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Jerry A rose made for a Rose. Eloquently presented with the needed flaws put in place to bring it all back to the reality of can't live without. You clever ol codger you! Eric in a relationship the me becomes we. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
You are right as you usually are, Eric, when you make the comment "can't live without." Thank you for your comment and insight. ~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Enjoyed this very much, Jerry! Helen |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Helen, it is nice seeing you here. ~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~ |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
The poem is beautiful. Enjoyed it |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Ken, I appreciate it. ~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~ |
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The_Doctors_Angel_32 Member
since 2011-01-14
Posts 337Florida, USA |
This is very beatifully written. The rose is like my all time favorite flower in the worl. I truly enjoyed the read!!! When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
LOVE this... A pleasing flush Or maybe a blush Ahh . . . I stand back still not satisfied And so I bend And christen thee with a kiss |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
The rose is one of the most beautiful flowers in existence, The_Doctors_Angel_32, I too value its charm and beauty. <><><><> martiniat8, thank you so much for reading and commenting on my poem, it is very much appreciated. ~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~ |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
i'm late to the party...but i'm so glad i came...JerryPat, this is brilliant...it's my favorite of your poems, it's that beautiful...great wonderful poem! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ah, thank you very much, Faith, I am very happy you like the poem, I sorta am partial to it also. ~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~ |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
the pleasure is mine...i love every word of it excellent work!There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
what a lovely evolution~this ~*~*~* |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you so much, bel1e, or Baby Girl, that is nice of you. ~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Smiling you... When summer comes, I shall take a photo of this very rose, and send it to you... the fragrance of it, is magical! Well done, sir. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yes indeed, there is nothing quite like the smell of a rose. I'll be looking for that photo. Thank you. I'm into the archives, but I thought there would be a search engine there, but apparently not. So, I'm manually going through the sites for Quinella. ~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jerry Pat...such an impressive poem. I like where you went with the idea and how you made something devine, live. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hi Martie. Hope you are doing okay. Thank you very much for being here. ~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I really thought I had left a response here. I must have lost my Internet connection in the process. Jerry, you really know flowers, in particular roses – or you really know God – or you really know your readers – or some of the above - or all of the above! Your poem recalls for me the image and the scent of the most beautiful and the most sweetest-smelling rose I have ever encountered – a Crimson Glory, which lives up to its name in every possible way. My mother’s Crimson Glories were her favourite roses of all the many roses in her rose garden, and takes me back to my childhood, with a surprisingly good feeling. Thank you. Owl |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I think I was just lucky when I wrote this poem, Owl, and my Muse was kicking ass and taking names. I particularly do like this poem myself, and thank you for your kind words. I am happy you were sent back to early, happy childhood times. ~ Some people are like a Slinky -- not really good for anything -- but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~ |
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