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Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 2011-01-31 09:47 PM

Atrophy

It is
what I fear
some wasting away, some silently slithering withering
of mental streams, a blockage that will
weaken my will
then shrivel my soul

Atrophy

I know the ink bottle will dry up ~
a shake of it will be crackling sounds,
not fluid, sans life, Sahara dry

Atrophy

the reasoning of deterioration
is to make more room, and dust doesn’t take
much room,
easily movable, just
blow

and it goes…

and may be it is
I don’t truly fear it, maybe the truth is
that it is an aberration, both words
requiring the need of F as a grade
for being,

for who needs either?

~*~

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JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

1 posted 2011-01-31 10:01 PM

You did this well. That word is on my mind, big time. Nursing home. I don't think so. Yes, it is on my mind.

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steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

2 posted 2011-02-01 12:03 PM

very close to home...a provocative write...nicely done

katahdin
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since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
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3 posted 2011-02-01 12:07 PM

Nicely done!
Kat >^..^<

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To love is to live

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2011-02-01 11:08 AM

Ditto dear heart!
Lori

faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

5 posted 2011-02-01 08:37 PM

very powerful write...great poem

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

6 posted 2011-02-01 09:35 PM

Oh dear, too many of us are pondering our fate.I understand. jo

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

7 posted 2011-02-02 08:58 AM

I was in the hospital recently and they would not let me walk or stand for a few days. I spend a lot of time in bed as it is, and so I didn't think this would really matter. When they finally let me stand again, I realized my legs no longer wanted to do what they were told. It was shocking to see how close we all are to Atrophy. As if just rests beside us, waiting...

I enjoyed your pennings and ponderings. Made me think, and that is a good thing.

GG

AlCowie
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since 2011-05-13

Posts 92
London, UK

8 posted 2011-05-16 12:00 PM

Scary, very clear the sentiments, lovely succinct thoughts

Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

9 posted 2011-05-16 05:45 PM

This poem just knocks me for a loop emotionally. A lot can be done to the body, but when your soul withers... That's what is so hard about being bored; it's the sign of an idle mind, and there isn't enough time. Very effective writing and a pleasure to read! ~Karen

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