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Open Poetry #47

Forced Consciousness

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

0 posted 2011-01-25 12:00 PM

FORCED CONSCIOUSNESS
January 1999

Keep awake ---
eyes burning ---
won’t open ---
light bright ---
remember ---
remember what? ---
Where was I up to? --- Oh, yes ---
Where was I up to again? ---
What was I doing? ---
What am I doing? ---
Must finish this ---
What is this? ---
Must finish it ---
Where am I up to? ---
Who am I? --
Why am I? ---
Wordsworth that he was killed ---
But he wasn’t killed ---
Who wasn’t killed?
He.
He wasn’t killed. ---
I think
therefore I yam
Yams stink
Pink yams stink ---
Yink stams ink ---
Yams think
therefore they yam ---
no, they yaa ---
Ja ---
René Descartes ---
Dey cart it away in heaps - sleep
came ---
saw ---
and conquered.

Owl

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

1 posted 2011-01-25 11:09 PM

I came
I read
I concurred

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

2 posted 2011-01-26 12:12 PM

Touché, Balladeer!

Owl

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2011-01-26 12:25 PM

May I add...

"ditto"....

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

4 posted 2011-01-26 12:58 PM

this was a nice, enjoyable write...I loved your playful word play in these lines:

"Pink yams stink ---
Yink stams ink ---
Yams think
therefore they yam "

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

5 posted 2011-01-26 07:29 AM

~smiling~

M

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

6 posted 2011-01-26 08:42 AM

Thanks, Karilea, Steaven and Maureen.

I wrote this when I was teaching and either had a deadline for marking exam papers by, or a self-imposed deadline for marking certain work or completing certain preparations - I was (and still am) a mega-dedicated workaholic. And when I fall asleep, I do it with gusto, and was fighting it and having half-dreams at the time because I was so tired.

Owl

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