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Human Candle
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Human Candle |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America 
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 Free Music when we are born the candle is lit its flame grows timidly at first developing in size as we grow in stature it burns hottest during our teenage years searching for identity discarding the old embracing the new throughout our lives the candle reflects each changing year as we explore who we are the flame burns hot then cold mellowing out with a warm radiance married now the children come a swell within our hearts as we watch them grow grandchildren come next the flame recognizes the births throughout our lives the candle reflects until finally nothing is left but a small flickering glow then . . . wisps of smoke as the candle dies ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Wonderful work as always. I like how you compared life to a burning candle. Kat >^..^< |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Nicely presented as a comparison Jerry Many life lines in this well explained by that flame. Good work man! Eric two maggots were fighting in dead earnest! |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Hi Kat and Eric. I am grateful to you for reading and commenting on my poetry. Thank you both very much. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
wow...this is just beautiful...i love it! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Appreciate it, faith. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I was just thinking about the candle burning last night...at both ends and getting shorter. Your thoughts on the matter are much more heartwarming and peaceful than mine. Thank you for sharing your way of thinking. Lori |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Hah! It may be more heartwarming and peaceful, but the end is the same as that one burning at both ends, of which I have done that also. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
exquisitely crafted story with exceptional imagery...a joy to read and contemplate |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
I thank you for the kind words, steavenr. ~ Life is sexually transmitted ~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Much enjoyed. Change brings the sadness of loss, but the challenge, motivation and hopes of the birth of the new. Even death heralds the afterlife. Owl |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
There is much to your comments, Owl. The vital object in trying to lie and understand the live you are living is that you have choices. Make the best out of them, and if they don't work out, not to be discouraged, but go down a different road. ~ Life is sexually transmitted ~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
You are so right, Jerry. As Frank Sinatra so succinctly and musically put it, "Pick yourself up, dust yourself off, and start all over again." Not easy, but the only route to go, if you want to smell the wild flowers. Owl |
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always4real Junior Member
since 2011-01-22
Posts 31A yankee that lives in NC |
I loved it. Thank you! "Happiness is a state of your own mind!" |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thanks, always4real. ~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die. ~ |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Your piece is wonderful; and that picture is quite something. Enjoyed. -Trina |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thank you, Trina. ~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die. ~ |
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