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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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sometimes you had your back to me like you were in a photograph and you were holding your hat on so the wind would not blow it away my arms were silly strings then wanting to wrap around your charms and know how your curves moved when you pretended to need to run another moment would ripple on the water and I would be distracted by eye blinks until you turned around again and pushed a smile over the male of me perhaps it was protection you brought in case I wanted out loud to wear you the first time pretty shirt of lovely that would never fit without trying unless your heart sleeves were strapless ______________ daark (forbidden series) |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
unless your heart sleeves were strapless - This is a killer last line. I don't know how you come up with the way you use words and images, but I am glad I don't. You are magic when you write like this. Ali-san |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms ali-san you are a smile in woman skin. Thanks babe |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I agree with Allison. *S* I love to walk the paths your lines take me down... but sometimes, the beauty and sheer genius of the words stop me in my tracks. *S* And that last line is a poem in itself. *S* |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms suthern, you give me shiverskin with your eyes on my seeping pen. Thank you lady. |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Whenever I come back here .... you never disappoint me....I remember heart sleeves, when I lost them before I really knew what they were and am left looking for who took them to try on another....keep writing .... you speak a mil words!!!! ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms king I would keep you sleeveless and in new tattoos. Thanks babe |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
"And pushed a smile over the male of me" I like that line. It makes me smile. ebonygirl |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Thanks ms ebony. |
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