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Being Alone
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Being Alone |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America 
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being alone has it finer points nobody telling you want to do take out the garbage if you want to or let it wait go a week and not shave wear the same clothes for days buy what you want at the store devour ice cream by the half gallon these and many more pluses' are the rewards of living alone oh . . . did I mention leaving the toilet seat up without sarcastic remarks uh huh that too ogling the pretty ladies without comments from the peanut gallery yes indeed I have got it made living life without fussing, cussing and walking on egg shells certain times of the month its great I'm here to say still . . . there are times when the soft humming of an off-key tune would be pleasant to the ears I'll admit the presence of healthy pretty flowers would not be so bad never mind a home-cooked meal sigh . . . even paradise has its drawbacks that garden you know the one in Eden it had drawback too slimy snake and a poisoned damn apple so . . . paradise maybe ain't all its cracked up to be you know when you get right down to it I ache for soft fingers scratching my back a sudden smile followed by I love you makes a guy feel special ah . . . maybe perchance that's it then maybe that is what I miss here in paradise the feeling I used to get when she said those words and made me feel special [This message has been edited by JerryPat (01-19-2011 05:39 AM).] |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
wow...this is wonderful...loved the way you expressed yourself in this one...there are too many good lines to pick out a favorite one! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
WoW! That was quick, faith. Appreciate your kind comments. ~ Why Do Gorillas Have Big Nostrils? / Because They Have Big Fingers. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
you are right Jerry, it is all about the feeling special. You captured this well Lori |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Yep. Special feelings. Special people. You got it, Lori. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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mikeandrew Member
since 2010-11-18
Posts 198 |
great work,can't live without them.enjoyed it. |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..expressed very poetically; the message well sung..>>spiros ----------- |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thanks mike and spiros for being here. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Lovely, Jerry. I hear you - it has to be that special person, though. There is nothing more lonely than being with the wrong person. You have inspired me to repost 3 of my "alone" poems. Owl |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thanks, Owl, and bring 'em on. About being with the wrong person. I quite understand that message. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Jerry I get you loud and clear and it's the truth. Most loners are not bad people. They're either a product of themselves or maybe upbringing. It's really hard to know but that intimacy you're writing about is special and most have to admit it. Loners, YES! But we (always been one myself even in the midst of other people) need that special closeness, the closeness that make the male and female complete no matter how much the rest of the world tries to distort the importance of that completeness. You're right on Jerry! Eric two maggots were fighting in dead earnest! |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Hi Eric, and thanks for chiming in here. I have psychoanalyzed myself and have a pretty good idea why I have chose to be a loner (even around people as you said), and it goes a long way back. I will have to also say that eventually I will have to admit one other entity to ride with me, and that is Mr. Death. It is unavoidable, but still I think he is very cheeky to just hitch a ride on my merry-go-round. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
That's true but it's not worth worrying about. I know your background from a religious point of view. You've explained it right here. However, read Psalms 37: 29 and Revelation 21: 4 I know you have your issues with the Bible but I think it's a special book and I'm not bearing down on you from some fanatic religious group but just out of my own research. Eric two maggots were fighting in dead earnest! |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Eric, you are pretty sharp. Yes, I do have some issues with the Bible. After I finish editing the novel I am writing at the present I will begin another one and its title will be GOD!. It will be about a young man who, after accidentally backing his vintage red and white Chevy over his little brother goes on a search for an explanation why God allows small, innocent children to be subjected with horrible and torturing diseases and other kinds of death. This man, Truman Butler, understands about "sin" and its consequences, but little children do not sin because they don't understand what sin is. He is not going to be put off by the old standby answer to this age-old question, "God works in mysterious ways," and "There are things we aren't meant to understand." This book is my search for answers using fiction as a way to go about it. Just wanted you to understand that I appreciate your concern and my attempt to make myself understand what, to me, is non-understandable. ~ Clones are people two ~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Hope I am not interfering - just wanted to say that God has given us free will. We aren't puppets with Him pulling the strings. We are responsible for our own actions, and there are repercussions to actions. Owl |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"I ache for soft fingers scratching my back a sudden smile followed by I love you makes a guy feel special" the placement of these lines along with their contrast to the preceding make them even more poignant...a very good write...enjoyed |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
steavenr, that back scratch will tame the ferocious wild beast in us guys every time. Thanks. ~ Life is sexually transmitted ~ |
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