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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
NOTE: please read dreamt as two syllables and pronounced rhyming with empty. (It might be a little easier to read that way.) dreamt promises and empty words two syllable sadness in a one syllable word sky-cylinder celebrations in whippoorwill shadows misting gorilla mist morning after morning sorrow checks in to the time-clock of life often early, never late in the dreamt realm seeking bereavement of the ushers of joy seated benignly on the second row back dreamt seats filled with dreamt hearts silently draining hope’s frail flame as dark clouds gather in a dream-filled world |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
this is really deep...wonderful imagery as well...enjoyed it alot! Faith There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I didn't read dreamt as a two syllable word. It reads beautifully as it is, through my eyes. Very nice, steavenr~ |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Nope, no two syllable word read by me either. Wasn't needed and in fact took away from the scheme of the sentence. Made me think somewhat of some of the beat poetry of the 1950's Grenwich Village, New York from where it spread across the nation, but it was mainly kept in the the Village. "Whoever is not in his coffin and the dark grave let him know he has enough."-Robert Goolrick from "Reliable Wife" |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
thank you, faithm…I am honored by your generous comments...I appreciate it Blues, after reading what you & JerryPat wrote, I had to go back and read it (and though I didn’t quite see it myself…) well, thank you kindly…you are too nice JerryPat, wow…beat poetry…Greenwich Village…I remember reading about that forbidden dark place (and though a child of the 50’s myself) never thought I would ever be associated with it…I feel silently exhilarated  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I dreamt it was two syllables but then I woke up and read this lovely work and thought it was just great the way I read it. No more dreamting for me! Eric Love does not look after it's own interests. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Eric, I like your style...many thanks |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I like it both ways too but the two syllable was unique and I enjoyed that experience. Lori |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Steven, as a child of the 50's myself. I wouldn't mind if Jerry conjured up one of those beat poems of the 1950's Grenwich Village, New York. How about you? Lori |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Lori, first...thank you, and as far as letting JerryPat loose...I'm for it...think we could get him to do it in the voice of Maynard G Krebbs (sp?) |
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