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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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While I sleep; while I sleep in the deepness of the night. There I keep; there I keep all the secrets I hold tight. As I roam through the dark I hold my dreams at bay Not all paths lead to home I plead to find my way Memories break and swirl Their dervish glares are stark Frenzied thoughts dance and haunt They leave me with their mark Carve my night into day The light breaks up the moon Let me bask in the dawn it beams into my room Let me wake; let me wake to greet another day. As I break; as I break The web of dreams away - Alison (As some of you know, I lost my confidence in my ability to write a couple of years ago. I have clawed my way back, often forcing poems. I woke up to this poem this morning ~ almost humming it ~ and I felt released. I don't add comments normally to my poetry, but thank you to all who bolstered me up. ~ Alison) |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
this is beautiful beyond words and so gently written...thank you for sharing your wonderful talent with us...i am glad you are here There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
faithmairee, I am glad that you are here too. Thank you for reading and enjoying my poems. xoxoxo Alison |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Congratulations, Alison, on being "released." I know that feeling very well. You certainly broke the web of dreams away with this one. ~ Why do we drive on a parkway and park on a driveway? ~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The repetition of a few of these lines are just like that, coming out of the dream web, breaking through... Alison, this is awesome! Headed for my library too! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: This is so wonderfully expressed, dear Alison. No signs of forcing, the flow is just perfectly harmonious. Love this rhyme scheme. Love, Margherita |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Alison, this is, as all your art, an exquisite poem, and I have devoured every Alison or Aziza poem I have ever come across. I feel your anguish (hugs to you) and the passage of your multiple emotions so accurately, beautifully, expertly and sensitively expressed right the way through. You know, I “get”/ understand/appreciate/admire/feel pretty much every single thing you write, but what I simply don’t get is how you, of all people, could possibly lose confidence in your ability to write poetry! I know it is a serious matter (hugs), and for that reason, I am loath to burst out laughing, nor to compare your losing your confidence in your ability to write poetry to believing that the sun got lost or the oceans forgot to be wet, but those are, in my humble opinion, accurate analogies. What I can assure you, is that nobody else could possibly have lost their confidence in your ability to write poetry. I, for one, have been reading your poetry for years, and regard you as a poet of excellence in every sphere, and one of the very best in Pip, and one whose works that I find, as I said, I never pass over without reading. Owl |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Carve my night into day The light breaks up the moon Let me bask in the dawn it beams into my room Let me wake; let me wake to greet another day. As I break; as I break The web of dreams away This is pert sweet honny bun...  Now what's all this nonsense about... losing, the ability, to pen... ?! Don't always worry about the form, and the structure, and the rules. You hear that voice in your heart right now... just write that down... its that easy... don't try to tame it my friend. Let it be free, just like you. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
could have fooled me about your confidence but I'm still relativley new here. I am overjoyed for you! Bless you heart! Lori |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
It is a delightful poem, Alison, with a great rhythm. I agree with Richy. Don't worry about form - make your own. Helen |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Jerry, Thank you very much. It was a great feeling. Alison - Sunshine, I am so glad that you got that feeling. It's how it was. xoxoox Alison - Margherita, Thank you for the comment and for reading. You make me smile. xoxoox Alison - Owl, I am simply blown away by your comment. You are a very intuitive woman, and I am amazed when you express your feelings about my writing. I need to look at it through your eyes, maybe. Love you, Alison - Richy, Thank you. You do my heart good. It wasn't about form. Sometimes I use form (or I am learning forms, which has helped me grow); sometimes I don't use form. One of my sisters (who I was once closest to) lashed out at me a couple of years ago. One of the things that she cut me open with was her opinion of my poetry. Now, I know the old "sticks and stones" thing, but it hurt me pretty deeply. I lost the desire and confidence to write. With encouragement, I didn't quit, pushed through and now I am past that. Yay. Thank you, xoxox Alison - Helen, Thank you so much. Please read my comment to Richy. xoxoxo Alison - LGB, Thank you for reading and enjoying. xoxo A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san..I always got in trouble for web dreams..or was it whet dreams..anyway...your pen never lost it's touch babe..we all have doubts sometimes and then we realize one day...I enjoy writing for my own sanity so WTF ..enjoyed it little one |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Alison... I know how hard it is when you want to write but just can't get the feel. I also have forced my self to write at times just trying to get motivated but instead I get aggreviated. The way I see it is poetry found me once and hopefully it will find me again. It's very hard when your mind and heart just can't find a way to do what you love doing. I enjoyed the poem...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Aha! You had a very interesting bedfellow (bedfella?) under your comforter last night! ~ Your muse! ~ and and amusing muse s/he be!  Loved this, Alison! There was something very special about this poem and how it came about! The Powers that Be, are with you and your pen! Keep writing girlfriend. You and your muse are a very talented duo! Love you, Lasky Girl! Linder Lou  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This is beautiful, Alison. It was worth the fight to regain your confidence. Ida |
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dreamgal Member
since 2011-03-17
Posts 442 |
Allison, I've always thought you had a unique gift with your writing personally. Never doubt yourself in your abilitys. But I guess we all do that from time to time. I enjoyed this it was very cleverly written. Dreamgal *smiles* |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
DS, This is a belated response to what you wrote, but you make a lot of sense. I, too, write because I enjoy it and I write for myself. So, I agree with you and appreciate you more than you will know. Thank you, friend of mine. Ali-san - Paul, If you read this, just know that I believe that poetry did not leave you. Sometimes, we just take a break. I look forward to reading more of your poetry. Alison - Linder Lou, I love you, girlfriend. xoxoxo Alison - Thank you, Ida. It's a continuous battle, but I am writing again. Yay. Thank you again, Alison - Dreamgal, You made me smile when I first read your reply and you made me smile again tonight. Thank you. Alison - Michael, Thank you for all you have shared with me. You are a special part of my life. Alison |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
A very beautiful release, Alison. I know how you have been feeling. I have been feeling like that myself. Haven't written much lately. Ida |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, dear Ida-friend. A |
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