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False Pretenses |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States 
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False Pretenses By Paul Wilson Your eyes lead me past threshold of doubt Promises…words spoken out of need Double edge sword wielded by you leave deep scars unable to heal You got what you needed no matter the cost soon tables will turn all will be lost Running out the door down the street temptation more than you can handle Afraid to let your feelings show false pretenses who will ever know Five o’clock shadow cast it’s lonely shape upon your living hell while you weep Night brings doubt as the reaper smiles come with me the wind says Flames of darkness flicker at your souls as you dance in circles till morning comes ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul [This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (04-08-2011 04:35 PM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Somebody seems to be in real trouble. Liked the snappy way you constructed the dark poem, Mr. Wilson. ~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Paul, this gives me the chills. You have written a true thriller poem here, with a touch of sadness. Great job. Love, Margherita |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
a sad and moving poem...enjoyed this poem dark or not  There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Is it getting a little chilly in here or what? Your title says it all and your poem portrays an unconcious and uncaring heart. But heck, you sure got your point across and wrote this with a certain kind of pretense, false or otherwise. Good reading, Paul~ |
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dreamgal Member
since 2011-03-17
Posts 442 |
This was very well written, a little dark,but if thats what your intent was you sure succeeded! I enjoyed it very much. Dreamgal |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Nice to be reading you again - even the darker stuff. I like this. It's interesting how you created the images that I saw. Alison |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
JP2...Glad you took time to read & thanks for your reply. You don't have to call me Mr. Wilson just plain old Paul is fine...Paul Margherita...Glad to hear from you dear lady. I'm still struggling with my writting, still trying to get back in the groove. Thanks for everything...Paul Blues...Glad to hear from you. It's been awhile since I posted here, but every now and then I get time to read other poets and you are one that I always try to keep up with.Thanks so much for your reply, glad you enjoyed...Paul faithmairee...Thanks for the read & reply. I'm told most of my poetry is sort of on the dark sad side, but thats where my thoughts dwell. I sometime try to let my anger and pain out thru my poetry...Paul dreamgal...Glad you took time to read & I hope it wasn't to dark for you. Thanks...Paul Allison...As always thanks for your kind reply. Sometime I just get my inspiration from a dark place in my mind. I often wonder what would happen if all the people that decieve others would have to go thru what they put others thru with their lies?...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
as others have commented, 'tis a darker write, but these lines are just too cool: "Flames of darkness flicker at your souls as you dance in circles till morning comes" ...well written |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Been a while since I've seen your stuff, my friend...enjoyed the read. j. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Paul! You're back! ~ with another fine poem coming from somewhere in "Between Fantasy and Reality". You certainly know how create a mood and pull your readers into it! Then again, creating an atmosphere with strong emotions is what you do best! Love to you! Linda Lou |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
steavenr...I have to agree with you on the dark side. Thanks so much for taking time to read and reply...Paul Jwesley...It sure has been awhile. Just trying to get my motivation and my mojo working again. Thanks for the reply...Paul Linda...I don't know so much about being back, but I am trying. Seems like the harder I try the more I get frustrated. Thanks so much for you sweet reply...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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