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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

0 posted 2011-04-04 05:13 AM

Yes, pull at the strings
until they've worn out
and beat it rhythmically
its a beautiful sound
isn't it?
the sound my heart makes
while you're breaking it

-Trina
Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2011-04-04 06:40 AM

Trina! Good to read you! Love this, it is so your style; intensely to the point with a unique angle or twist. Love your stuff and hope there isn't a real jerk out there you are writing about. (grrr)
Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-04-04 07:34 AM

Some men like to gear that one string symphony, Trina. Don't give 'em the sanctification.

~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

3 posted 2011-04-04 02:26 PM

True love is unconditional, no strings attached.

This was great Trina!

Spiros Zafiris
Senior Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 982
Canada

4 posted 2011-04-04 02:40 PM

..to the point and lyric; you have the makings of a good tanka poet..written well

..spiros
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EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

5 posted 2011-04-04 06:11 PM

Very apt and universal feeling to this.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2011-04-05 03:36 AM

What a superb poetic twist you put in these few cleverly arranged words.
Good good good......You know what I mean>?>

Eric

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2011-04-06 12:27 PM

Sounds like there is a sadist musician at work here.

That was a great read ... but don't allow anybody to break your heart!

Love,
Margherita

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

8 posted 2011-04-10 07:58 AM

Thanx Lori lol No there isn't any jerks around me haha

Why I would never Jerry, Thanx for looking in

Thanx Richy

Thanx Spiros I'm flattered

Yep, Thanx Eric

I won't Margherita, Thanx for looking in.

-Trina
Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self.

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