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Sun-warmed Sands
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Sun-warmed Sands |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas 
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Sun-Warmed Sands Errant seagull feather flicked free by preening beak, see-saw floats in downward spiral, whisks skyward in cloudy billows, pushed by wind off white-capped sea, caught by childish hands. "Look mommy, Daddy see . . . the seagull gave it to me." Yesterday - a month, a year, sun-warmed sands feel the same beneath bare feet almost sensing foot prints long gone; stopping at water’s edge, they wait, so lips can blow lovingly kept seagull feather off palm of hand. Which see-saw floats in downward spiral, whisks skyward in cloudy billows, pushed by wind off white-capped sea, up . . . up . . . up . . . Seagull feather, Love of you and me. © wesley james beard, jr. march 2011 [This message has been edited by jwesley (03-27-2011 10:29 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hi jwesley, this is such a touching poem, it evolves into so much more than one reads into it with the naked eye. Just beautiful!!! Great to read you here again. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Good to see your face and name again.You were missed.Enjoyed your poem. latearrival |
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twistedpup Member
since 2011-02-25
Posts 115 |
what a soft read, i enjoyed it greatly. *hugs* |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
A very calming read. Brought many sounds and images to mind. Thoroughly enjoyed this. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
jimmy, I have missed you, my friend. This is wonderful reading and brings a smile to my face. Thank you for sharing and coming back for a bit. alison |
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dreamgal Member
since 2011-03-17
Posts 442 |
This was very tender, and relaxing to read, I had a long day and this was just what I needed to unwind. Thanks for sharing. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: There is so much love in this verse, dear Jimmy, that the warmth of the sand expands and touches the heart. Beautiful write, so glad you are back. Love, Margherita |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
I love this vision of joy. A feather carries so many gentle connotations, but the bouyancy is always magical. The innocence and happiness of children so pleased with nature's treasure is a gift to remind us not to loose sight of simple beauty,too. Their hearts are so pure. I can see the images and the scenario of a balmy beach day so clearly, the child, the feather. It's balm to my spirit. Thank you! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
So breezy, soft and so very tenderly rendered... well done, I loved this  A |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
After coming back and reading the comments here (and I sincerely appreciate them all), I guess I failed with this piece as it obviously didn't convey what I wanted (unless I misread the comments). Only my wife (and maybe Blues) saw it for what it was - - - the death of a child. Will have to more closely watch my wording next time, as I want to get the idea across, but don't want to use explicit phrasing like death or died or anything similar. Again, thanks for the reads -- have to try and spend more time in here ... really miss the family! jwesley |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Jimmy, reading your comment I feel like saying that you worded this in a wonderful delicate way. It was evident that you spoke of a child, I thought of the memory of tender moments of childhood long past, but not of the death of this child though. This makes it even more touching, heartwrenching actually. Love, Margherita |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Jimmy, I am not trying to sound wise after the event, but I was going to say (before I read all the replies), that it was very beautiful, but there was a tinge that disturbed me and I was going to ask for reassurance that the child grew up and moved away and hadn't died. Sadly, I see that I cannot ask for that reassurance. I am so very sorry for your loss, whether recent or long ago, though I suspect long ago - time, I know doesn't heal. People just grow stronger in time in coping. Such a loss is the most terrible of all to bear. You have honoured your child in a most exquisite and worthy way. It is a good thing that you are able to write about your child. It is a way of comforting yourself and bonding with your child in Heaven, who is now Daddy's and Mommy's Guardian Angel. Tears Owl |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
No, I did not feel that, only the exuberance of a child's way. It's a lovely write, either way, and moved me in the reading. Children are so guiless... The memory is so tender. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I did think of your daughter ~ and I still think that your poem shows such a tender and beautiful memory of her. I was not good in expressing this to you, Jimmy. I remember from other poems you have shared ~ and I treasure each one of these poems that you share with us. Alison |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Fortunately, it WAS NOT my daughter or child . . . actually this stemmed from a combination of things...friends that have lost children/grandchildren and several fairly recent programs on TV about ill and/or dying children. Thanks to all of you, very much, for your warm concern though. Jimmy. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Loved the imagery. Many memories. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I continue to trip over my assumuptions, but I do love this poem in spite of that. xoxoox A |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Glad to see you back, Jimmy and with such a beautiful and touching offering. Ida |
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