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Prim, Prime Time, Oh Rose
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Prim, Prime Time, Oh Rose |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Prim, Prime Time, Oh Rose Who but man woulds’t count, ‘tis true the curl and color and winsome hue of a prim and prime rose in glory, yet, ‘tis woman who but would tell true stories ~*~ and smiling I in all this while beseech thee, love, with but a smile for here is staid of heart, ‘tis true while one smiles she thinks of you, in glories seized thus by most true held charms t’would one devoted hold in her arms any but that she thought not best? Yet, and here I fear, I’ve failed first test and sorry be I, for in this failure that rings would have been a voice in joysome sing for in la petit morte, divided lives fell both squandering time in lonesome hell, sans glory… Donne would say, and did he, indeed in numbers primed and divided, decreed that woman would take over their lot and man, yes man, he would be besot in stories… …for the sounds within the heart of girl lifts her through life in all its whirl till woman stands before man and deed and he, who wrote, yes, he paid in heed and glory. For truest is this, if truth would be but read a woman indeed, would take man to stead fast in her life if but he be solemn, true, and hold to him close, and never rue her glory. ~*~ Repost For LindsayP (c) 3/2004 |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
Brilliant!!!!! Thanks for sharing your beautiful poem with us all. Loved it, Tracey |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
a woman indeed, would take man to stead fast in her life if but he be solemn, true, and hold to him close, and never rue her glory. Beautiful truth written in such enchanting form. *S* |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
smiling...very nice...very, very nice |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Karilea!!! I'm so glad that you reposted this, I've never seen it before. Oh YES...who, but a lady indeed!!  love this..  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read  |
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Bloodline Member
since 2009-05-23
Posts 236Oklahoma |
Love every word, and really love the ending like a sweet soft ribbon to enfold the gentle tenderness, and truth, Bloodline |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
Wow I am impressed, like reading one of the old masters. Delightful poesy. Heart2Heart |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
God, you write brilliantly! I love this. |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Karilea, this is absolutely beautiful! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Friends, Thank you for all of the wonderful comments. I brought this back to share with you because a friend of mine at my last position recently lost his "Rose". She was a fine companion, a true woman, a dachshund. Still, the poem fit both the feelings, and the companionship. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Karilea, I am confused as to whether Rose is a human woman or a sausage dog (a dachshund) - or is "a dachshund" an Americanism meaning something other than a sausage dog? You have captured the style of John Donne admirably. Owl |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Enjoyed this, Karilea. Ida |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A true lesson in refined poetic language ... So good to read you, dear Karilea. Love, Margherita |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dear Karilea, thank you so much for the repost of this lovely poem, I felt quite humble and honoured that you should repost it for me. Love to you my friend and God bless. Lindsay |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Beautiful, Karilea .. just beautiful. A |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
Simply awesome... Isn't it wonderful to be a woman! Hahaha.. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Diana, This poem was originally about a woman. Then, Lindsay noted some old time work of mine in this style so I thought I would bring it back for him. Only a day later, I shared it with another fellow that I had worked with, who lost his beloved Dachshund, Rose, after sharing a good, long life with her by his side in his red convertible. He always said, "she always made the girls in other vehicles turn and look at her. And of course, I thought they were looking at me!" While I understand it was confusing, hopefully the recipients all enjoyed its intent. Lindsay, so glad that you enjoyed! |
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Billie Cullimore Member
since 2009-03-27
Posts 315 |
This is brilliant I know I enjoy being a girl and I know the men in my life sure enjoyed my being a girl. Now, take this any way you want to. Ha Ha. Love yor poem Billie C. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Being "Dachshund" (Dackel) a German word I had no doubts about Rose being a sweet little dog. Enjoyed your explanation too. Love, Margherita |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Absolutely poetry... what a wonderful write so so good to see you and read you again Luv Lee J. |
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