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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2009-06-19 04:45 PM

Mist swirls as if propelled to be
a lifelong living entity
but creation writes the story
and makes of mist a seasonal
and passing happenstance.

In comes in low and stealthily
with the mind of a criminal
intent on stealing love
and ransacking true insight
and then it disappears
as fate decrees it must
to allow the “Seek and Find”
its chance to be around.

Seek sticks close to ground
and ferrets in the dirt
for what was lost when mist was here
and it travels like a bloodhound
sniffing, sniffing, sniffing,
and listening, listening, listening,
for “Find’s” time of exultation
to pierce the air and echo
through time immortally.

And all is still and silent;
mist was trained overseas
or maybe in the bowels
of the deep underground
and it’s a perfectionist
when it comes to stealth and stealing.

Seek and Find, poor Seek and Find,
the story gives them arms and legs
a torso, head and feet,
a mind for facts and figures
and a heart for pumping blood
but of a soul that knows all things
a treasure far too rare
to be shown and made known.

But there’s mystery in all stories,
twists and turns in every plot,
and that’s why we have… toes!

Helen / 19 June 2009

Heart2Heart
Senior Member

since 2009-05-15

Posts 738
Scotland/Norway

1 posted 2009-06-20 03:38 AM

I surely know about mist and the shape and size it comes swirling in can certainly get the imagination going. This is an extremely deep and well written poem with many metaphors and then a little unusual and humouristic turn at the end. Great write Honeybunch :-)
Heart2Heart

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2009-06-20 08:47 AM

Thank you so much, Heart2Heart. I guess all things happen just to keep us on our toes so we'd be pretty lost without them.

Helen

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2009-06-20 11:26 AM

oh Helen, truly amazing write...remarkibly bittersweet, held me and wouldn't let me go...whew...my eyes are tearing...how thoughts overpower us...but the ending was great...left me feeling very good....

hugs to you
Lee J.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2009-06-20 01:38 PM

Thank you, LeeJ, for the hugs and your comment. A story is better than a sleeping pill, yes?

Look after "you".
Love
Helen

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2009-06-21 07:06 AM

I love how your mind works, dear Helen, poetess.

Was reminded of an essay I read by Hal Manogue/shortsleeves, see here:

Click on "Show Original Post"

https://www.blogger.com/comment.g?blogID=2628537567061021308&postID=2445325540293078782

Love,
Margherita

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