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The Cure (new edit)
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The Cure (new edit) |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
She was up She was down She was up She collapsed over and out She called up out of the blue Surprise, she had tickets and she decided to call... you! So happy So excited She was coming to get me but, I should've picked her up she barely ate drank wine got low drank coffee now, late for the show and the pain hit her joints took a pill couldn't type couldn't talk her messages all a blur some strange Freudian Murmurs She was sad She was apologetic I felt lucky and empathetic I love her but there's nothing I can do When she won't let you in but is still calling for you She was up She was down She was over and out It was going to be special We we're going to have fun but by the time the night was over She started calling me, "Hun" :-) [This message has been edited by martiniat8 (09-05-2009 11:33 AM).] |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
a strange and sad story, very interesting telling and I can feel the distance spreading between you two. thanks for the poem. yann |
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GBride Senior Member
since 2009-07-02
Posts 538 |
Sounds like you are making progress. Each day I search the list looking for poems that get few comments. Today I am reading yours because everone need to be listened to. You have an interesting poem. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
That was some evening, wasn't it?! There is a fantastic rhythm in this poem and it is very vivid and even tragicomic. Love, Margherita |
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ESHA SEN GUPTA Member
since 2009-09-01
Posts 108Maharashtra,India |
Loving still inspite of everything is the greatesst thing one can do.Wish the world was filled with such people. Mrs.Esha |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Bobbing boats aren't easy to board. People can be equally difficult at times. |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Such a wide array of comments. Islander, I should've been more clear or referenced that she was going to pick me up, but I should have, so she wouldn't have gotten out of balance and her health broke down. I think we're getting closer, though she may feel like a failure because of her health. We will see what happens. Today is a new day and hopefully she is feeling better. Thanks everyone. Bobbing boats are hard to board but gently she rocks, gently she rolls |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
sounds like your persistence is paying off? always enjoy you, brad  |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Oh Shell, I don't know about that... Only time will tell and as to the crux of the matter, I will write about that in a bit |
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