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Martie

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0 posted 2009-08-02 03:04 PM

In the dustless world of words
a seraglio of woman gather;
whispering stories,
singing songs,
soundlessly laughing
at the whims and foibles of life.

For a time
they are unafraid of love,
as easy tears gather
with the human sweat
of skin.

[This message has been edited by Martie (08-02-2009 07:06 PM).]

Marchmadness
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1 posted 2009-08-02 03:22 PM

"In the dustless world of words." interesting thought, fine writing.
Ida

thoughtfulthinker
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2 posted 2009-08-02 03:32 PM

I really like this.

Martie

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3 posted 2009-08-02 03:42 PM

I've been gathering words that are not used often, some of them very beautiful both in sound and meaning, and making poems in their honor.

The meaning of "seraglio" with thanks to What's the Good Word?" from alphaDictionary.com

1. A part of a Turkish palace in the days of the Ottoman
Empire where wives and concubines were secluded or confined;
a lavish harem. 2. The palace of a Turkish sultan, especially
the one in Istanbul. 3. A place of confinement (a bit archaic).

Earth Angel
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4 posted 2009-08-02 04:02 PM

A stark change in mood from the first stanza to the closing one. Acutely ~ yet deftly ~ done!

Thanks for refreshing my mind about what a seraglio is.

It's nice to see you posting again in pipland's garden, Martie Flowers.

Linda

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

5 posted 2009-08-02 04:27 PM

I am always learning something new from you, Martie, and looking this up I saw there was a 2000 movie of the same name and a book also...

M

Kaoru

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where the wild flowers grow

6 posted 2009-08-02 04:28 PM

"as easy tears gather
with the ruthless human sweat
of skin."

..VERY cool work here.

moonbeam

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7 posted 2009-08-02 06:14 PM

Mmmmm Martie you almost make me want to stay around. As Meg says, this is wayy cool, lol.

I'd be inclined to lose the "ruthless" maybe, but otherwise no nits at all.

Martie

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8 posted 2009-08-02 07:07 PM

I think you're right about that word, Moonbeam...presto, it's gone.

Margherita
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9 posted 2009-08-02 07:48 PM

quote:
a seraglio of woman gather;
whispering stories,
singing songs,
soundlessly laughing

That is the joyful part of the seraglio, as you so beautifully say. They surely try to uplift each other in this way. It is still a golden cage, where no one can really be happy.

Very profound and captivating.

Again let me repeat that you had a great idea of letting these words inspire you.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

jbstillwater
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