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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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The bottom of this bottle has a letter you never sent, buried underneath the scent, crawling toward the mouth of your silence. Tonight, the moon hid callously behind the clouds, uninviting and in a whispering growl denied me. Stumbling in the doors of mourning, of a loss, a piece of soul is tripping me, there are holes everywhere, gripping at my feet. Your words melt, so solemn across the paper, stained ever longing for rain to say what it needs to say, but instead it pours away in murmurs misunderstood. And much like me, the Earth has become enraptured in the solitude and ache, and the whispers take their way to the north, and wonder when you'll realize that you were my mistake.. so sorry to make, to create you only to destroy any recollection or existence. You are a ghost now, like an uprooted flower, or a seed not planted, never to have been, never wanted, or explained. So quiet in the response you take nothing, you are nothing, but a dismissed thought passed through letters in the breeze. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Powerful dismission, dear Kaoru. I am impressed as always by your talent. Nothing that has been can be turned into non existant, but you are right it can be dismissed, especially after your acceptance of the implicit lesson. That and forgiveness dissolve the pain. Hugs. Margherita  |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
K Your voice is compelling, and I seek you out like a favorite song on the radio. Striking and refined write. Heather |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
This is a fantastic write. You are indeed a great writer. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Absolutely amazing, Kaoru!! Really loved that last verse. I adore your poetry, and always look forward to reading you. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
And you are now free to make new memories with new people! May they be glorious! ~ The memories ~ as well as the people!  I wish I could get the right side of my brain to work like yours! What a writer!!! Linda   |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
A ghost like an uprooted flower.... you always do such awesome and unique imagery, that everyone can recognize a poem by you with this tremendous talent. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms K...you peel the wrapper off and show the bottle how it looks from the other side of the label.. way kewl stuff!@! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Just blow it all away like dandelion feathers airborne You pen is mighty even for the fallen ones |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
In the depth of the words nails reaching out, you nailed this beautiful piece. |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
This is nice Meg, it reminds me of a Harlequin Forest in fact.  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Now that's a dismissal. Way to go. Ida |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
enjoyed...James |
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