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Nature's Lament
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Nature's Lament |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland 
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Branches snake, and grey leaves shake as winter chokes the air. Little wings with big bodies. Flying is impossibility, cemented, Burrowed into earth. Where worms blindly find their way, and the dusted bones of a thousand men rest fitfully below us. “Persephone, don’t sweeten your lips With the sour stain of dark places The berry red of lonely faces” What was blue, a deathly hue Now finds its countenance on you And the long green leaves now croon Greensleeves Lamenting their captivity Green and red and blue and gold Are all but shades of grey Shadows, mist and vapour. Shadows of what it was, Or what it could have been. |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
Springtime's wonderful sentiments and perhaps some sad moments caught in this delightful poem. A truly beautiful write and pleasure to read. Heart2Heart |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
What was blue, a deathly hue Now finds its countenance on you And the long green leaves now croon Greensleeves Lamenting their captivity ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Very nice, especially like that verse up there. |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
*sigh* I'm back home. thank you. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Welcome home - I will be glad to read more of your poetry. Alison |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
thankyou, I can't wait to grind the right brain back into work. Been suffering with science and lab reports for tooo lonnggg. Give me a pencil and let my heart do the rest! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I loved the cadence of this...with a shade of reverent invocation...nice write |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
This was wicked sweet. Impressed. -P Everyone deserves to be loved, even you. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
By the way, I love all of your poems by default. Because your name is so sah-weeeeeeet. -P Everyone deserves to be loved, even you. |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
steavenr- what a lovely response, thank you. viking metal- sweet is always good *so says she who at this moment is eating chocolate* And I have no idea what was going through my brain when i signed up! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
An enjoyable read with some really great lines! |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
thanks, I remember reading lots of your work. Am excited about catching up on them again! x Cheye |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Well-crafted visuals here. A delectable read. Mark |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
"sweet"..delectable"... I'm getting hungry! *grin* thanks Mark |
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