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Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

0 posted 2009-12-07 02:09 AM

Mum I’m sorry If i'm not perfect
And that I’ve never tried to be
I’m sorry that I can’t be anything
Other than the disappointment you call me.

Mum I’m sorry that when I was younger
I hit the bottle hard
But you taught me pain from the start
And I guess it threw me off guard.

Mum I’m sorry I couldn’t agree
With the way you treated everyone
And I’m sorry for the paddy wagons
That brought me home undone.

And Mum I’m sorry for that time
I licked the icing spoon
I know i promised that I wouldn’t
But id spoken way too soon.

Mum I’m sorry if I’m not very good
At pretending that everything’s ok
I know I don’t always play by your rules
But not everything can go your way.

Mum I’m sorry if I cry sometimes
When you’re yelling in my face
But sometimes it gets pretty hard
To hit the ground with grace.

Mum I’m sorry that you hate me
And that I’ll never deserve your love
I really did try to be a daughter
That you were always going to be proud of.

So Mum I'm sorry that I’m not perfect
But I don’t think I want to be
Because the only time i can be happy
Is when I am free to be just me.

Inside this exterior, over which the eye might have roved there was the record of a pulsing life, which had learnt too well for its years – Thomas Har

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

1 posted 2009-12-07 04:27 AM

argh this hits home SO FREAKING MUCH.. i hate not being good enough.. but it's not the point if you have to be somebody you're not..

GREAT write...

I love you Lee.. just the way you are!!

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

2 posted 2009-12-08 07:04 AM

aww love u too Jess

and thanks for the feedback, its hard with mums like that aye, i think half the time i'm raising her.

Hope everythings going good for you.
xx

precious pearls
Member

since 2009-07-24

Posts 110
NJ; United States

3 posted 2009-12-12 08:04 PM

loved it!!! could really relate, my grandmother does the same thing sometimes, and the way you described it was the way I feel EXACTLY! beautiful, extraordinary poem

Always,
Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

Zeigeist
Member

since 2009-12-09

Posts 311
Michigan

4 posted 2009-12-12 09:35 PM

A wonderful write filled with emotion and introspection. I love it.

I saw one line that the flow was kinda interupted.

Mum I’m sorry that you hate me
And that I’ll never deserve your love
I really did try to be a daughter
That you were always going to be proud of.

( that you would always be proud of.

try replace the last line with that and see how it sounds to ya.

Zeitgeist.

ThatOneGuy
Junior Member

since 2009-10-27

Posts 33
Indiana, United States

5 posted 2009-12-15 04:13 PM

this is one of the better poems i've read. i really really like your writing you are very talented.

m48
Member

since 2009-12-02

Posts 108

6 posted 2009-12-15 04:16 PM

again what a story i liked the last verse.
i would want to be fake perfect for any one either, even my mother.

kudos on the write.

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