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Euphoria Lost
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Euphoria Lost |
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Moonkist Member
since 2006-09-29
Posts 197Pennsylvania |
Paradise gone Euphoria lost The bubble has burst But at what cost Sadness creeping Depression setting in Dreams are fading With much chagrin Why does it happen Why can't it last Why does such loveliness Now reside in my past Can't go under Gotta fight Cuz depression sucks Must hang onto the light Where do I go What must I do Hanging helpless Without a clue Hoping this time is different Hoping it all won't go to hell Hoping that God's listening And wishing me well Hangin' tight Okay for now Want to leave this dark place And live somehow |
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graeshine2006 Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368The Prairie Lands, USA |
You are having a great start at beating depression by writing this. Keep fighting. Get out. Kind words to yourself. You will beat this crap! Keep writing and know that others are hoping with you! PS - first time I've had to change my reply! I used the "s" where "crap" was! oopsie! |
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Moonkist Member
since 2006-09-29
Posts 197Pennsylvania |
Thank you graeshine for such a nice reply. I will definitely heed your words of advice. Appreciate your words of encouragement here too... Thank You! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: I bet many can relate to these thoughts! But I wish you to trust that loveliness will enter again your life. This is a very emotional write and brings across the message powerfully ... but I suggest you substitute that word in the last stanza, which doesn't fit into the elegance of the rest. ("shadows" maybe ? or something similar). Love, Margherita  |
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Moonkist Member
since 2006-09-29
Posts 197Pennsylvania |
Thanks Margherita for your reply. I think you are right about not using profanity in this poem (or any poems for that matter!). I can't find the right icon to physically change my poem... once I do, I'll update it. Thanks for your critique and kind words as well. |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Hi Moonkist. I can so relate to this. I was depressed (Manic) all my life and didn't know it. I thought it was normal until it was finally pointed out to me in a way I understood. Then I got very angry to learn life could be better than what I was living, lol! Meds and counselling for me. But my present sense of well being cannot restore what passed by in my lethargy. My heart is with you. Don't let living pass by without a game and savvy fight! ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
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Moonkist Member
since 2006-09-29
Posts 197Pennsylvania |
Thanks XGarapanX and vandana... I was diagnosed with bipolar back in '94 and the highs and lows are still hard to deal with. It's nice to know I have support and that I'm not the only one going through it... Thanks for your replies! |
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