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Cul de Sac |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa 
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CUL DE SAC 21 June 1982 A woman gazes at a man in a cage And searches for the key that will let her in To share his Hell And gently lead him out to Freedom. She finds the key But the keyhole has been cemented in. She turns away from the man With dried cement on his hands. - Owl |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Some walls need a sledge hammer and time to come down. Nicely portrayed sentiments. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Savior Owl, Thanks for trying I am sure he would say if he heals. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thanks, Mark. Smiles, the sledge hammer wouldn't have worked on him, but time and contemplation did! Thanks, inkedgoddess for your sweet thoughts. Actually he did - and a lot more . . . 2 years later. - Owl |
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shortsleeves Member
since 2008-10-19
Posts 125Franklin Tennessee |
I like this one Owl. Hal |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thanks, Hal. Glad you liked it. - Owl |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Having been 'drawn out' through a few knotholes (if not keyholes) likely by the nose, and ultimately to no good end ... perhaps I can understand the cementing! Interesting 'write'! serious applause!! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you Bruce for your interesting perspective. Yes, I too, understand the cementing, but I am too naïve or too trusting or too brave or probably just plain too stupid to do the cementing myself - it may make one more vulnerable and one may suffer more - but it is infinitely more enriching and more fulfilling and ultimately I know I am much happier for it. - Owl |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wonderful write, Diana! I guess some people just enjoy a good temporary self-caging. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Owl, You're too easily discouraged. Get yourself one of those big bolt cutters--makes it easy as pie. Barge right in there. Love Bobby |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you Kacy. If it is temporary, then there is light at the end of the tunnel. Giggles, Bobby! Just picturing it! - Owl |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This one makes one think, Diana. Enjoyed. Ida |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Your title and analagy gives your piece serious impact! It's so sad that some seem to only grow physically for years. God bless, Rae |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Dear sweet Owl,I think that great suffering have created solid cement, may be she should hammer the door(women can do that)and forget the key and may be they could be together....However it is a very enjoyable poem and it teaches a lot... have a nice day yann |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Ida. I am glad you enjoyed it and that it made you think. Thank you, Rae. Actually he grew in so many ways and he taught me more about all sorts of things than anyone else - love, life, horse-riding (we both had a horse each), poetry, indigenous trees (my garden forest started because of what he taught me), birds, flowers, music, - opera in particular, ecology, looking up things one doesn't know instead of being too lazy to do so, to mention a few - but his twisted back gave him certain psychological problems that were difficult for him - and me - to handle. Thank you Yann. Actually, yes he did have great suffering. He had a brilliant brain, but had no self confidence, largely because he developed a twisted back at the age of 16 and it was getting progressively but very gradually worse. Actually I did try more than just the key - I suppose I did try hammering the door to a certain extent (but there is a point where one needs to accept defeat, and I did), and he did come back to me, totally out of the blue, of his own accord, 2 years later, and we had a wonderful 18 months together - then I left him in 1986 because I couldn't handle his psychological problems, then regretted it, but he wouldn't forgive me or take me back, so that was that. But thanks for your kind concern, Yann. Smiles. - Owl |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Dear Diana...your work from this time is definitely heart rendering and very precious that you share with us... hugs to you my friend .. love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wow, dear Diana, your "Cul de sac" is one of the most effectful and creative renderings of self-imposed reclusion and denial of help I have read. Stunning work!! ... painful reality ... You are one amazing Poet! Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you Roniece. I only share such work with people I feel trust and feel comfortable with - and Pipsters are precisely such people! Thank you Margherita for your special words. Yes, it was a very sad reality. - Owl |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Marchmadness - a great write about trying, and trying. Sometimes it works, other times perhaps not. Wishing you well... BC |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Actually, I'm not Marchmadness - I'm probably a 12-month madness, LOL. But thanks for the comments, anyway. - Owl |
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