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The Loves of Her Life
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The Loves of Her Life |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
His gentle brush glides along And smoothes her graying hair Tilting back he guides her chin Lips meet in supple dance She turns and slides To straddle narrow hips Surrendering completely Unto his reverent kiss They pause to break Then eyes meet eyes Minds say a knowing, Aching need She leaves him then Disrobing as she turns He follows suit behind her And in quiet room they fall Every cherished wrinkle Each remembered scar A history of loving Of oneness they become Subtle touch of stroking Taste and sound revered Then the noise of banging And the words… “Hey, Mom, we’re here!” |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
just goes to show you get caught at ANY age |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
amusemi - really caught me with this fabulous ending. 'Hey mom, we're here'... Very nice... BC |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the Ending as well!!  ARCTIC WIND |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"Every cherished wrinkle Each remembered scar A history of loving Of oneness they become" warm words that end in smiles...thoroughly enjoyed |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Ahhh ... the moments life brings to us and how quickly they can be taken away. Made me chuckle at the end. Wonderful write and sensual as well. |
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shortsleeves Member
since 2008-10-19
Posts 125Franklin Tennessee |
Great work! Thanks for sharing it. Hal |
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Sharon Rose Member
since 2008-11-03
Posts 51 |
What a cute ending to a beautiful poem. |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Thank you everyone for reading and for your wonderful comments. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
beautiful write. yann |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
So beautiful and tells a fabulous story. I grinned at the ending. I like how it is romantic and then adds a bit of humor at the end. Lovely write. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I loved the poem, complete with wrinkles and scars and assurances that love is ageless... and then the ending... absolutely priceless! LOL |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You really touched me and amused me with this tender write! Very well done! Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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