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ILoveTheRain
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since 2008-03-02
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0 posted 2008-03-20 12:39 PM


I was going for help,
Walking down this rocky pathway.

I seem to sense a presence…
With this horrible feeling of anxiety
I start to walk with more brisk.

I hear a noise not far away.
I stop in my tracks.
And turn around, but it is much too dark,
I cannot see anything around me.

Suddenly a light forms in the distance.
It is coming extremely fast towards me.
I attempt to run, but my whole body is numb.

Then, in an instant,
The blurry sight of this light instantly stops.
I see an elderly woman, beautiful as can be
In a blindingly white gown

She tilts her head and smiles
She tells me everything is going to be alright
Extending her arm out next to her,
I see a ghostly figure of my best friend.

She smiles at me...
Telling me it was her time,
She reaches out towards me with a look of sadness
When she gets close, they both disappear into the night

Tears streaming down my face
Wondering how I could have done this to her...
We were both intoxicated
I crashed into a pine tree

I was trying to go for help in time
Walking down this rocky pathway…

But it was too late


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ILoveTheRain
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1 posted 2008-03-20 03:47 PM


This isn't about me...it's just something I thought up. The ending kinda takes me back by surprise, lol. But it carries a good lesson to all...don't drink and drive.
JamesMichael
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2 posted 2008-03-21 03:54 PM


Nice writing...and I like the don't drink and drive message...James
Marchmadness
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3 posted 2008-03-21 07:59 PM


Me too.
    Ida

simon
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4 posted 2008-03-21 09:08 PM


scary...
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