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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india 
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Rain rain ================== Mother told her to save them for rainy days. The rain drops on the future this noon. This noon of annihilated sun. And, this day she breaks her piggy bank. Opened, a note from a distant land With roaming nomads of memory Flies out. It flies to and fro, settles On the dust over a black book case. A currency it is, to be cashed In a different plain, in a world With strange lights and figures of the past. A sepia lane and lame cat crossing… A sparrow touched by death A motherly hand placed on her head. Mother told her to save them for rainy days clever talks delay friendship! |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Ku, I like this line 'This noon of annihilated sun' another good post. Only 1 criticism, that pink text hurts my old eyes.... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I agree with the Pink text. Otherwise, I thoroughly enjoyed this! jimmy |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I think they give the pink text for a reason  -- I like it..ARCTIC WIND |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
The more I read it the more it speaks to me. And it moves me. A wonderful write, dear Ku. You and the words make a great couple. Love, Margherita  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Haiku! ~ Hi, Ku!  I like the tone and feel of this write. "Mother told her to save them for rainy days" ~ and we should always listen to what our mother says.  Linda |
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simon Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 440London, England |
Really enjoyed this, another one of your wonderful pieces that stays with me when I've finished reading it, thanks. I'm now feeling a little bit sad. Not a big fan of the pink text either though... |
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