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teddymarvelle Junior Member
since 2007-08-26
Posts 47california usa |
the light was leaving us and the west was blue childrens laughter rippled like the stones they threw upon the water was a reflection of the sky stars chased away the day a tear came to my eye i watched my tear fall to the surface and ripple out like it had some purpose they say in the darkest night there is a light beyond but there's a such fine line between the darkness and the dawn twilight now invades us and still the west is blue the childrens laughter ripples like stones and teardrops do a blushing brilliance so awsomely divine that here upon the water all the ripples intertwine |
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Jess Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 243Washington |
Lovely! The wording was very colorful and what a great flow it had.  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i feel the words |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"twilight now invades us and still the west is blue the childrens laughter ripples like stones and teardrops do" nicely done teddy |
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teddymarvelle Junior Member
since 2007-08-26
Posts 47california usa |
thank you to all the ones who posted here your comments mean alot to me.. i am totaly new to this site though i learn fast .. i have not quite got the hang of this interface yet... so i thank you here ..till i find out how to track you down and comment on your work... so again thank you |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Yes, this is lovely! "all the ripples intertwine" They do indeed intertwine - we perhaps just don't know to what extent but we're learning all the time. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Teddy~ This is absolutely wonderful~ It is such a pleasure to have you here in this marvelous circle of poetic friends~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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