Now There's You (a song for my current girlfriend)

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Open Poetry #41

Now There's You (a song for my current girlfriend)

rachaelfuchsberger

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since 2007-02-21

Posts 609
Las Vegas, NV

0 posted 2007-08-21 08:13 AM

Now There's You

I never really knew,
That there was someone like you.
I never really imagined,
That love could be another language.
I never really saw,
That love was the ultimate law.

(chorus)
Now there's you.
Now I speak a language so new.
Now I see love, the only law that's true.

I never really knew,
That I could love like I love you.
I never really imagined,
That I could speak a wordless language.
I never really saw,
That I could follow just one law.

(chorus)
Now there's you.
Now I speak a language so new.
Now I see love, the only law that's true.

I never really knew,
That my heart was meant for you.
I never really imagined,
That my heart spoke a foreign language.
I never really saw,
That my heart overruled my mind's law.

(chorus)
Now there's you.
Now I speak a language so new.
Now I see love, the only law that's true.

(bridge)
Now I know.
Now I imagine.
Now I see.

(chorus)
Now there's you.
Now I speak a language so new.
Now I see love, the only law that's true.

Rachael

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2007-08-21 06:44 PM

Nice...nice...nice...
"I never really knew" seems to overemphasize, perhaps or perhaps not...
I prefer "I never knew."...but its your song, not mine...James

rachaelfuchsberger

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since 2007-02-21

Posts 609
Las Vegas, NV

2 posted 2007-08-22 07:17 AM

Thank you for your comment. I'm glad you enjoyed my song overall. The "overemphasis" is a necessity to the passion of the song. It also makes the line flow with the rest of the verses. Saying "I never really knew" is indicating that I had a hint of knowing these things existed, but I couldn't see them as real until it actually happened. I hope this helps it make more sense. Again, thanks for the comment.

Rachael

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

3 posted 2007-08-22 08:43 AM

Oh, the language of love! ~ and you 'sing' it so well! I am certain that your beloved was touched by the apparent sincerity of your words.

Love & Light,
EA

rachaelfuchsberger

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since 2007-02-21

Posts 609
Las Vegas, NV

4 posted 2007-08-22 09:31 AM

Thank you for your comment. I am glad that you enjoyed my work.

Rachael

aziza
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since 2006-07-09

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5 posted 2007-08-22 11:08 AM

Lovely, Rachael.

xoxoxo
me

rachaelfuchsberger

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since 2007-02-21

Posts 609
Las Vegas, NV

6 posted 2007-08-22 06:42 PM

Thank you Ali. I'm glad you like it.

Rachael

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