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Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

0 posted 2007-08-15 03:04 PM

There is but little left remaining
that does not give rise
to this ash
that would cover the soul

In dreams

there are mists
masking the remembrance
of parched lips once touched
by the sweet refrains
of endless eves

quenching momentarily
the need to know more
of hot August nights
wrapped in heat
that dissipated rapidly

into the mournings

of memories
that are close enough
for fingertips to touch
in the dawning light;

and reaching upwards
I try to recapture a moment

to feel that feeling again

only to find in palms pressed
these remnants held of

burnt offerings.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2007-08-15 03:40 PM

nicely done ma'am...

the form and style suits you well..

like the wording in this..the images both implied and portrayed...

very nice.... indeed

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2007-08-15 04:46 PM

Yes, such it is...the burnt offering can
be more than just biblical, and very appropriate as well.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

3 posted 2007-08-15 07:00 PM

capt, I have to chuckle because I honestly don't believe I have any particular style...lol...I just put on paper what spills out of my mind and heart. Thank you kindly, sir.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2007-08-15 07:01 PM

Barry, you see well into my words. Thank you for looking so closely and big hugs coming atcha.