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Open Poetry #41

Carefree

Roysie
Member

since 2007-08-05

Posts 102
Canada

0 posted 2007-08-12 07:23 AM

I saw them out walking
all hands and arms astray
a motley crew indeed endowed
with hope and determination and
very little coordination
they passed me by unthinking perhaps
of life and cruel fate as
I was thinking of how lucky I was
to be me and not them
to live and love and fulfill
my obligations endless sometimes
never giving up or in or
over to humdrum mediocrity
fighting the good fight striving
for success and reward and
not feeling as happy as they looked
not back but forward carefree

Roysie
Member

since 2007-08-05

Posts 102
Canada

1 posted 2007-08-12 09:58 AM

Lets play a game. Can anyone guess who I'm describing?

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2007-08-12 10:06 AM

I come to read the best of your tenderings, and discount with verve any selfish or self serving whim.

Your poem brought the thoughts a geese in a gaggle, much like the youth I observe on the busy street corner. There is a sadness and a difinitive victory that is conveyed.

Roysie
Member

since 2007-08-05

Posts 102
Canada

3 posted 2007-08-12 10:14 AM

My whimsical tenderings spring from tenderness, my dear.
Geese is not correct although your insightful comment is right on the money!

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