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Held At Bay
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Held At Bay |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
you are a perfect grey this morning your fog a heavy shade of grim the darkened shroud on your cold shoulder prevents the light from breaking in a dreary mist obscures your horizon the dampness wraps you in its chill it muffles any life around you the mark of time is standing still if morning light could touch the dewdrops they’d shimmer like the rain in your eyes that falls inside your weighted sadness onto your polished stones of ice in silence, mother earth is drinking hidden in the safety of her mooring swallowed up in dark, and drowning in her perfect grey of mourning |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
oh my, lady this has ominous written all over it!  I drove near your stomping grounds last week on the way to Victoria, BC via the Olympic Peninsula, Hwy 101. Beautiful!!!! |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Thank you, Ms. Midnite. I have actually moved to the Olympic Peninsula, so you were REALLY close! Dang! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
WOW, then you live in a mini-paradise! My daughter and I drove from eastern WA to Port Angeles and took the ferry across, spent 2 days in Victoria before making the long drive back. That cruise up and down 101 is incredibly beautiful! I wish I'd had more time and $ to visit the depths of the rain forest. Next time... perhaps, next spring or summer. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
oh, this is soooo lovely! Very nicely done, Kahlil! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Now THAT is what I'd call, "creating an atmosphere"! My word! You have me cloaked in it! ~ So realistic! Very well written, my long lost friend! ~ Good to be reading you again! Sending some sunshine your way ~ & a great big hug, EA |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
thank you, all of you for your sunny thoughts. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Kahlil, What a mood you set with this! Wonderful wording and imagery. I like the layers of depth! miscellanea |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Thank you miscellanea! It's good to see you again. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
you warm with this blanket of words just lovely |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
ahhha, I loved this...makes me miss the coast so much, cause that is where this took me instantly in my mind....  |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
thank you so much, i-goddess yes, SEA, the Oregon Coast, my favorite. thank you! |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Kahlil I am so glad that I stopped to read. You swept my breath away and I could get it back til the end. This is so beautiful. Just so beautiful. Alison |
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