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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada 
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a thousand tiny bells ring when she laughs - one dissonant when she sings - a note discontent, sobbing, throbbing ear cocked for a wild breath subtle seduction proud shadow upon the screen growls night music tales of prowess, his great need teeth and lolling tongue displayed hypnotized by night claws rake secret desire her robe falls away Part 1 [This message has been edited by BBGrrl (08-07-2007 05:53 PM).] |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada |
just subscribing |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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FadingSun Member
since 2000-05-01
Posts 76Southern California |
wow, I felt like there's this whole story that can be written or read, before and after this poem. I loved it! In the sight of Love, fear isn't even as great as a single hair: in the law of Love, everything is offered as a sacrifice |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I can't highlight any one line, for each line is not without the other...this was profoudly beautiful... |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada |
Thank you James. Fading Sun - I have edited to add a link to Part 1 - and yes, there will be more, but I might have to change forums *wink* Thank you, Lee, you've very kind. Not classic Japanese poetry, as the subject metter is people rather than experiences, but I hope to have at least conveyed the flavor of the forms. |
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Bronzeage Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 197 |
A sweet write, BB. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms bb, something growing lovely in this, enjoyed it |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada |
Thank you, Bronze. *kiss* More to come, daark. |
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