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Open Poetry #41

Closer To Perfection

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2007-08-04 04:26 PM

Closer To Perfection

My girlfriend goes back and
forth from Hawaii to Chicago,
and I want her close even though
its not always possible.
On two or three occasions
I thought she broke with me
and at times from her I tried to break,
no thanks to the heartache.
For now I strive to live with
this ever changing situation.
When she's gone I feel
pain and rejection.
Within her arms,
love seems closer
to perfection.

JamesLee
04August
2007

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

1 posted 2007-08-04 04:34 PM

~that long distance love-ride is a bumpy one, to be sure~

poem is sweet, though~

~All the best~

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

2 posted 2007-08-04 05:15 PM

fine, 'real' and heart-felt 'write'!

applause!!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2007-08-04 06:39 PM

Thank you belle and secondhanddreampoet for the nice responses...
It has been both a silky road and a bumpy road on occasion...James

DennisTheMenace
Member

since 2005-09-04

Posts 240

4 posted 2007-08-05 04:38 PM

This a perfection I can understand, I got a girl that is perfect in my arms ( or me in hers ). Good poem

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