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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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I walked across the street the first time you laughed at my shoes undone and asked if they were faster to get in and out of that way I ignored your braless comments and pretended not to notice the bare of unsheathed thighs exposed almost to heavenly considerations as you stepped from your dented benz and began walking toward me too soon to be a chance meeting of strangers in the parking lot of a five star without a valet if you pull around under the veranda overlooking the ocean and act like you have been there before and are just returning again to finish addressing the actions of proper attire ____________ logograph by daark [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (07-17-2007 06:33 AM).] |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I love this poem. It's so visual - I see both of them. You know laughter builds within the dents of the Benz. A |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
"and act like you have been there before and are just returning to again to finish" Laugh-presentation is everything. I believe you could pull it off, no matter where you go. Love, reg |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"I ignored your braless comments and pretended not to notice the bare of unsheathed thighs exposed almost to heavenly considerations" ~ I would recognize those words as being yours regardless of where I saw them! ~ and that's a GOOD thang!   EA |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
I love this one. It is goood. I read your poems but it is little bit dark sometimes so I did not leave a word...too scared. enjoyed this one. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
sometimes stranger darlin' the only proper attire is the improper kind... love it |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms az, thanks lady for the read and smile sides they mean a lot. ________ regalone, you soothspeak me babe, thank you for the long legged eye ways ___________ ms ea, I am blessed that you would recognize the fingerprint of my scribble, thank you so much _____________ Ms Dz, I appreciate your reads...there is light in everything I write really..I often hide it under something so you have to look under. thank you ____________ ladyone, I still want to watch you dance your laughter...thanks ms |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Indeed, sir, there is light. Enjoyed. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun, thank you lady friend, you make me smile at dreams |
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