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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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on maybe street you would be dark wood with heavy scent of secrets embossed with carvings suggesting but not yet completed and I would be drift sand safety covering just parts of you while the moon noticed others and the wind too was a voyeur there one with bad eyes that had to touch and you would moan sometimes when you were exposed more and less of me covered you but then again the wind seems to enjoy the together of us more than you alone so I move around and almost cover somewhere else just when the moon was becoming comfortable ___________ daark |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's so enjoyable, walking your horizons... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Your use of imagery is so masterful that each reader can see a different picture painted in front of them than perhaps the next can. For some reason? I saw a man walking a deserted beach at Moon/Night/day break with a small broken boat along the shore line and him walking up to her, casting shadows across her as the sun rises, admiring where all she had been and the stories she could tell. (ok, so I have a vivid imagination...  )This is what I saw. As I said, your use of imagery is so unique. And your closing lines? Always perfection big daddy.  I loved this one D. [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (07-23-2007 10:47 AM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
enjoyed this  |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada |
Very much liked this one daark. Mysterious and sensual, moving. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
awwww...I loved this. gave me a smile and a moment of memory  M |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
and I saw desert sand and damnably long legs stranger darlin' |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thank you ladies for the review...I am humbled at your comments |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I loved the image this put into my mind - thank you for what could be a very good dream |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thank you ms...hope you sleep well |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I see Blackwater Slough It's dark even in mid day Trees reaching to the sky skeletal arms And even in the warmth of summer the air dances with the wind and chills heated skin The moon is there just out of sight And this I see from your words Hot days cooling in river lowlands |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms az, I shall visit there when I close my eyes, thank you ms |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
~~~wow~~~direct me to maybe st...LOL...enjoyed this, darkie~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
lil belle...thanks babe ___________ ms van, thank you for the read |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
great write Mr Daark... loved this! RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
another most fine ‘write’ from an exceptional poet!: I especially LOVE: “…dark wood with heavy scent of secrets”; and: “just when the moon was becoming comfortable” serious applause! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this...James |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
R & B thanks ms _________ secondhand, thank you for the pleasure of your touch ___________ james, thank you sir for the read |
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