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Open Poetry #41

Pale Autumn Words

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

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Bewilderment , USA

0 posted 2007-10-15 03:03 PM

Oppressive forces linger still outside this pleasant scene.
The pen stops momentarily to ponder what this means.
The eyes see color all amassed in Autumns' vibrant hues.
Deluding me, the whispers say, that words can match these views.

That's not to say such beauty's lost, it's felt intrinsically,
but,doubt can overshadow it in mediocrity
thus bleeding vibrance from each leaf against a pallid sky
and stifling creativity, yet somehow still we try.

With tools too crude to fashion these, the wonders that we see,
to offer up the slightest glimpse, at best, occasionally.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

1 posted 2007-10-15 03:05 PM

never seen your poetry

nice and fresh

ARCTIC WIND

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2007-10-15 06:01 PM

Your words are not pale, they are quite brilliant.

I loved this. It's true we are never satisfied with how our words describe what we feel, but it would be sad if we didn't give it a try.

Love,
Margherita

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

3 posted 2007-10-15 06:02 PM

"bleeding vibrance from each leaf against a pallid sky"
Great line!

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

4 posted 2007-10-15 08:42 PM

Rich in feeling Doc.

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

5 posted 2007-10-16 07:20 AM

Artic,
Thanks for your comments, I haven't posted much as of late.
Doc

Margherita,
Thank you. Over time it seems to be getting
more difficult to write anything ( I had thought it would get easier ). Oh well, as I usually write on paper first, this probably saves a few trees.
Doc

Midnitesun,
Thank you, I thought that visual pretty well summed it up. Maybe I should have just skipped the rest.
Doc

ThisDiamond,
Thanks, If that came through there may still be reasons to pursue this.
Doc

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