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Country
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since 2007-10-15
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0 posted 2007-10-15 12:24 PM


I'm new here and I know I should read for awhile and make some comments on other works, but I like to jump right in.It is my perfered way of learning.So I'm going to post one of mine and I look forward to your comments.


A WHISPER IN THE WIND

She hears her name spoken softly in the dark
Sweeter then the sound of a meadowlark
Turning around to find him, searching for his face
In that lonely empty space
It’s just a whisper in the wind

Her heart beats like the pounding of a drum
Tears fill her dark eyes, she is overcome
She begins to tremble and falls to her knees
Listens for a sound on the breeze
A single whisper in the wind

In reality she knows he was never here
She closes her eyes, tries to draw him near
Wills her heart from her body into the night
That shines for her like a blinding light
She’s just a whisper in the wind

In her mind she finds him, two hearts join as one
If only for a while they lay out in the sun
Joyful in the joining like a soft melody
Love lifts them up, sets them free
Like a gentle whisper in the wind

She feels the pull as her body calls her heart
Time and distance pulling them apart
Holding on, she can’t let go
Of love and joy she’s come to know
Nothing but a whisper in the wind

Soon she loses sight of him in a distant mist
A fading memory, a feeling, a kiss
Drifting away, her vision becomes dim
With a lonely tear, calls out to him
Sends a whisper in the wind

© Copyright 2007 Country - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2007-10-15 12:35 PM


Country~
Ah ... we both seem to love the wind ...
the gentle thoughts it blows our way~

This is lovely and again I welcome you to our PiP circle~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Marchmadness
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2 posted 2007-10-15 01:24 PM


Welcome Country. I hope you enjoy the site, I haven't been here long myself. Lovely first post,
                                Ida

Country
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3 posted 2007-10-15 01:58 PM


Thank you guys.  I look forward to learning alot here and getting some constructive critism and meeting some very nice people.
Earth Angel
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4 posted 2007-10-15 03:34 PM


With a title as lovely as "A Whisper In The Wind" and an author with the name of "Country" ~ I was sure to stop by! ~ and I'm glad I did!

Your gentle words were whispering to my own heart. A lovely write!

Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug,

Earth Angel

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Realm of Supernatural
5 posted 2007-10-15 03:35 PM


Beautiful Words

ARCTIC WIND

Country
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6 posted 2007-10-15 04:39 PM


I am overwhelmed by your kind words.  I am also very happy if my words gave you enjoyment.  Thanks.
Margherita
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Eternity
7 posted 2007-10-15 05:55 PM


Welcome to Pip!

These are lovely whispers in the wind, it is an enjoyable read.

Love,
Margherita

JamesMichael
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8 posted 2007-10-15 06:17 PM


Nice...James
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aloft
9 posted 2007-10-15 06:36 PM


An interesting and melodic progression!

Welcome to this place!

~glider~

LindsayP
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10 posted 2007-10-16 11:55 PM



Welcome to Pips, Country, I'm sure you will enjoy all the interaction with the other poets. Nice write.

Lindsay

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