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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. Autumn And the salmon are running Up the river through the harbor In Michigan City The sun not yet risen Above the horizon Still is felt by the heart In the cool blue air There are lanterns Lit along the shore And on the break wall That reaches out Under the glow Of a morning star If one lives And loves long enough Life becomes more and more In memory of who isn’t there That good old man Sitting in a fold up chair At the end of the pier The beautiful girl With her radiant hair Casting a line Into the sea . |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
Bait, his dream Fish, his heart My sincere wish Beautiful poem. I esp love "If one lives And loves long enough Life becomes more and more In memory of who isn’t there" How true Generally you put you sigh at the end of your poem. Now, you hide it IN the poem. It gave different feelings. As if the emotion was too strong to be allowed to go free and out of control. Beautiful! Tomtoo |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A pleasure to read...so true...James |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
If one lives And loves long enough Life becomes more and more In memory of who isn’t there~~~ my favorite lines M |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
My dear friend's mother passed away today...a extremely kind woman at 73. My own mother is struggling for her last breath now. I am living a life as such as that only memory carries me along my life journey. Shall I live a life like this? The poem touched me deeply. It has kept replaying all day long. sad, though. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Thank you all Edna Saint Vincent Millay wrote that childhood is a kingdom where no one important dies. The sadness then is a sign that one has become an adult however much one might have wished not having had to. Thanks again John |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Every vacation's got to end sometime....and after several months away from the blue pages, what better way to return than by sampling Huan Yi? I could do more than sample by now, I could read a book's worth just catching up, and there should be books. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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sky1er Junior Member
since 2007-08-13
Posts 16Peru, currently |
The old man on the pier reminds me of my childhood neighbor sitting on his porch in his folding chair. Makes me nostalgic -- both sweet and bittersweet. Good poetry. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Thanks both Glad to see yah around Ed John |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Your words are so true. Nicely written. |
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sky1er Junior Member
since 2007-08-13
Posts 16Peru, currently |
Yes, I really like this. I want to be the girl with radiant hair! You've created a whole fantasy world for me. Saving this... |
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sky1er Junior Member
since 2007-08-13
Posts 16Peru, currently |
I guess I have to figure out to save it first. That done, now lunch! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Hi John, I am new to the sight and just getting aquainted with your beautiful poetry. I am enjoying it very much. You are truely talented. Ida |
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