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Elements Of Me |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced 
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Elements of Me There is a silence, then reverie then a comfortably distant pain these are stationary elements of me heart, still and idle, bound by rain that carries a thunder, yet far away not loud or great enough to be known he knows that I will always stay assuming my concomitant state of alone. Existing within me, without questioning why without asking if I might run away should it come closer and intensify would it ever be like me to betray the elements that make up me the team that forms my grain this, the silence, then reverie and the ever-present pain... I will stay, he's always known, provided I'm allowed my state of alone. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
simply awesome Dixie!  RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I have to be honest. I both hated it, and loved it. I hated it because the first stanza feels like a stagnated surrender--and I want more now (C'mon...you've got it.) But then your second stanza reveals you complicity, so it is hard for me to have sympathy, even when I understand.... I loved what you did with the poem though, I really thought it stretched beyond longing, and I could almost "see" you weighing options on both hands. Much love to you, my Dixie Dear. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I found it very moving to read this authentic soul-searching expose. I found the following lines to be especially discriptive ~ and touching. "heart, still and idle, bound by rain that carries a thunder, yet far away not loud or great enough to be known". You have been taking steps forward in leaps and bounds when it comes to knowing and understanding youself, Darlin' Dixie! You are a beautiful work in progress! ~ and thank you for sharing your intimate thoughts and self-appraisals with your caring readers!  Sending you a great big hug-o-love, Linda |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Dixie , this is yet another one that touched my heart and you know why Hope |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
these are stationary elements of me heart, still and idle, bound by rain that carries a thunder, yet far away not loud or great enough to be known this to me and for me touches great emotion, courage, knowing full well the spirit is everlasting...yet, growing... and indeed you have...your heartbeat has become so profound Dixie.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very touching write dear Dixie..  You are sharing your inner thoughts more openly now. In the midst of winter, |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Yes . . . touching! You've claimed your space within occupied territory. Don't give it up! Robert |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
we all need to stand alone sometimes....beautifully written!!! ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dixie...There must be holes within you from all the deep digging that you do to find out the truth. That's a good thing. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 thanks allenjoyed the depth of these replies |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"heart, still and idle, bound by rain that carries a thunder, yet far away not loud or great enough to be known". have to agree with Linda Angel your heart is on display here... totally good or bad matters not excellent Dixie |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Dixie, fantastic write, excellent use of words to bring us along...loved the cadence...just lovely... |
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