Morning After the Night Before

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Open Poetry #40

Morning After the Night Before

PEBBLES
Member

since 2006-10-30

Posts 69
South Australia, Australia

0 posted 2007-02-08 01:52 AM

What is the sound the wind speaks,
slightly melodic tinny wind chime
with rusty crust squeaks, can’t compete.
Chocolate wrappers on the floor, many rum and cokes
beer and smokes, elucidate the night before.

Music playing, too loud to ignore.

Torn brittle wire, hinges like rusting fingers,
old wire door malingers, warped, twisted, unprotected.
It shudders, slams, wind blows chocolate wrappers
like twirling dervishes across the floor.

Music playing, too loud to ignore.

Pungent aroma wafting, reminiscent of a meal uneaten.
Cigarette buts, air stifling, empty cans,
tousled clothing strewn across the floor,
arouse vague yet troubled memories of the night before.

Music playing, too loud to ignore.

Cockroaches, Ants, scurrying towards safety
burrowing in dust balls beneath the fridge and the floor.
Chocolate wrappers give shelter to fatted insects,
helter skelter forming lines of mini tents marching
towards the door.

Music playing, too loud to ignore.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2007-02-08 09:17 AM

I love the way in each paragraph, you paint a marvelous picture...could smell, touch and feel everything...amazingly good write...enjoyed

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2007-02-08 09:27 AM

Well writ

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

PEBBLES
Member

since 2006-10-30

Posts 69
South Australia, Australia

3 posted 2007-02-11 09:46 PM

Thankyou dear folk, I really enjoyed penning this one. Oo-roo Helen

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