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Open Poetry #40

THE DROWNING NEWS

shirtless
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since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

0 posted 2007-06-20 09:34 PM

THE DROWNING NEWS

andrea yates
drowned
her five children
in the tub –
the one
she drowned last
was named noah

god almighty
drowned
the whole world
in the rain –
one that he spared
was named noah

this is not a comparison
but a simple report

the floor
near the tub
was slippery
with bubbles
of madness
that drifted
from tiny fingers

the sky
above the ark
was filled
with aching
wings
of birds
that fell
into a sea
of flailing arms

there were curses and prayers

there were prayers and curses

droppinginsideout
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since 2006-08-04

Posts 54
TENN

1 posted 2007-06-21 05:53 AM

wow man, this was awesome. simple yet powerful. enjoyed it, nice write.

Jamison

~Jamison~ "feeling sorrow for all the things u had to steal and borrow, bring back the dates we had b4 tomorrow"-red jumpsuit apparatus

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

2 posted 2007-06-21 01:07 PM

a poem. an old story. still why she did it?

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2007-06-21 09:01 PM

sad stuff

BBGrrl
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since 2007-07-17

Posts 181
BC, Canada

4 posted 2007-07-17 02:50 PM

Wow.
I can't critique this - it's elegant, simple, and very very powerful.

Can't say I enjoyed, exactly, but what a read!

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

5 posted 2007-07-19 05:53 AM

oh my ...

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2007-07-19 01:34 PM

I was chilled to the marrow of my bones when I saw, a while back, a 'special' report on TV about this horrific story. You just brought it all back to me in vivid technicolor.

A chilling and tragic tale ~ well told.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2007-07-19 04:07 PM

Where I live, Yates is in the news a lot. Your "simple report" is compelling, chilling... excellent!

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