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Freshly Cut Grass
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Freshly Cut Grass |
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jak Member
since 2007-03-14
Posts 85Charlotte, NC 
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Sharp scents of summer snap under feet Blades lean low as to signal defeat Crisply formed fibers flash emerald rays Broken bodies stand dead drooped in day Bashed and bright lay the meadow sleeping Half lay lifeless and half are knelt weeping Jak |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yes! I really enjoyed this one jak! Great imagery! Most excellent indeed. Hugs~Nancy ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I like the last line most of all...I can see blades of grass knelt weeping. Fabulous imagery. |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
I felt the great sorrow. I say, Soft aroma of summer shaving in the air. A very sentimental one. it is very interesting that I kept thinking how beautiful the lawn is behind your poem. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
I might not be able to mow my lawn this year!!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
alliteration, metaphor, excellent phrasing, brevity, meter, and even rhyme...makes an excellent package...add great content and you get this wonderfully exceptional poem...superb!!!! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Perfecto! Loved that last line....that is exactly how our mower does it, too. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
This is good John |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Bravo,..bravo,..bravo,..  Welcome to passions, you are definitely in the right spot my friend!!!~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
 >Hmmm..grass seems to be the topic of the week! Thanks for posting a reply to my poem! |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
I love this, wonderful imagery...bravo!! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hey jak! Good to 'see' you!  |
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howardtsu Senior Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 678 |
this is what my mother dreams of |
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