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JLHunter
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since 2006-10-08

Posts 557
CA United States

0 posted 2007-03-17 08:05 AM

Anguish
A Senryu String

Life must precede death,
but only by a small bit.
This knowledge drives grief.

Howl at the night sky!
The pain leaps into the void,
assailing the stars.

Stars feel pain, keenly;
They are silent, but observe
the anguish of loss.

The now-saddened stars
bleed light and plunge to Earth
from sheer empathy.

Stars wink out of sight.
Too much pain has brought them down.
The darkness deepens.

The starless sky mourns
its children's self-sacrifice
as fallen heroes.

The featureless void,
lifeless, now grows colder...but,
all the pain subsides.

And just as soon, stars,
their sacrifice not in vain,
glow bright where they lay.

Phoenix-like, they rise,
gaining in intensity
as they fill the sky.

The cycle complete,
the stars that eased the anguish,
once again shine bright.

As the pain recedes,
the beauty of night returns.
The stars twinkle hope.

Life must precede death,
but death must precede life, too.
Rise, become a star.

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

jak
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since 2007-03-14

Posts 85
Charlotte, NC

1 posted 2007-03-18 11:48 AM

an epic tale.

Jak
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Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2007-03-18 12:58 PM

John~
You certainly did these well ~~~

Intriguing read~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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JLHunter
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since 2006-10-08

Posts 557
CA United States

3 posted 2007-03-22 10:20 AM

Hi, jak.

Yes, it did grow a little longer than I had intended. Thanks for the nice comment, though.

John

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

JLHunter
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since 2006-10-08

Posts 557
CA United States

4 posted 2007-03-22 10:24 AM

Thanks, Marge.

I worked long and hard on this string. Maybe a little too long and too hard, but then, here it is!

Love, John

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

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