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Enticing Time
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Enticing Time |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
Enticing Time Tick . . . Tock . . . Tick . . . Tock . . . Tick . . . Tock . . . Tick . . . Tock . . . The minuscule swing of the clock that beats time out in a tick tock tick tock The song of the swing oh the music it so brings with its slow tick tock tick tock Time has caught us all and it’s not so willing to let go of the tick tock tick tock Ticket to the future that never expire is the swing in your once ago tick tock tick tock Tell what your thinking when you look into my eyes and when you fall tick tock tick tock Clocks are in the making while hearts are in the breaking, look at what you’ve done Clue into what is going on around you- it’s nothing small that you’ve made here Connect the dots that you threw haphazardly onto the paper you sung out of the tree Can’t the moon burn red and can’t the sun go black and dead in your absence I abide Loops weren’t made for people like me and you, we were meant to be on the outside Lies were the inventions of those with hearts of stone- for you and me the outcasts Look at the clock shop and tell me what you see- more goes on the clock repairs so see it all Learn the song that the clock makers sing I’ll play it in my sleep when nothing calms me Tick . . . Tock . . . Tick . . . Tock . . . Tick . . . Tock . . . Tick . . . Tock . . . The minuscule swing of the clock that beats time out in a tick tock tick tock The song of the swing oh the music it so brings with its slow tick tock tick tock Time has caught us all and it’s not so willing to let go of the tick tock tick tock Ticket to the future that never expire is the swing in your once ago tick tock tick tock Tell what your thinking when you look into my eyes and when you fall tick tock tick tock Make my clock the one that you love the most- give it as your very fondest gift Memories can fade and your eyes can forget mine that shine the color of cheated jade Maybe the day will last a little longer if you put the words into a song form for me My wouldn’t you be so bad, if you weren’t so good at being innocent at all the right times Promise that all that you’ve been working on will be mine; the clock beats with my heart Promise that love prevails and that your wills last longer that eternity does Promise that you are the cure to all my infirmities, because I know you can cure me Promise small and simple things that you can do for me, and I’ll promise you back Tick . . . Tock . . . Tick . . . Tock . . . Tick . . . Tock . . . Tick . . . Tock . . . The minuscule swing of the clock that beats time out in a tick tock tick tock The song of the swing oh the music it so brings with its slow tick tock tick tock Time has caught us all and it’s not so willing to let go of the tick tock tick tock Ticket to the future that never expire is the swing in your once ago tick tock tick tock Tell what your thinking when you look into my eyes and when you fall tick tock tick tock Ticket to the future that never expire is the swing in your once ago tick tock tick tock Tell what your thinking when you look into my eyes and when you fall tick tock tick tock |
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jayjara Member
since 2007-05-02
Posts 90Florida |
This a kool poem, it has structure and its able to say a lot about time your thoughts on time...good write -J |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
this is a kool poem but unlike the other person i think the structure could use some works and like my comments on your other poems it seems the breaks aren't in the right place so the rhymning doesn't seem to appear at all unless your ead it as if there are breaks but nice job on this one as well its one of my favourites |
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