it was very good like the first one but better...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Hmm… I’m not sure I can offer much of an opinion on if it is more improved in this poem or not because I just vaguely remember the original.

I’m not sure if I like or don’t like this poem; as with most poems there’s things that I like and dislike. I found that I was able to “hear” the frustration but I couldn’t understand where it was coming from. “You” say that “you” just wanted to make it through the day, but what makes it so that you want to do that? What is making you tick I guess is what I’m trying to say. I mean, great job, I felt the … frustration in this poem but I don’t understand where it comes from, exactly. I must be very dense in things like this… lol…


"Im always telling them "be yourself"
But right now there's nothing I want more
Than to be somebody else"
Loved this part in the poem, in fact I would call it the best stanza in the whole poem, JMHO. The contradictions within itself make it to be an interesting mind teaser.

Thanks for sharing/listening!

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino            @-->---