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Goodbye Love |
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prettypinkrebel Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 104 |
The darkness is calling Tears begin to slowly fall Her mind is racing she thinks about one and all misunderstanding, confusion, temptation,love and pain No emotin left to loose everyone is gone an she know longer knows Ready to give in as her past of blood and knives slowly sears wounds deep into her mind Relizing she is finally left behind she screams........ GOODBYE LOVE!! Life is normally a broken road....so look ahead for the cracks! |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hi prettypinkrebel, I'm a little confused by this poem, well, mostly by "past of blood and knives", I'm not quite sure how it all works out but I did enjoy reading this, it was something a little different then what I normally read. I do have a suggestion, perhaps instead of using the word "darkness" you might expand upon what that "darkness" is/could be, instead of leaving it so vague. Just an idea though. Unless of course the suggestion in the poem is that the "darkness" is cutting and you prompted the reader with "blood and knives". Anyway, glad to see another new face on here, it is great fun reading everyones poems, I hope to see more from you |
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prettypinkrebel Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 104 |
the darkness is cutting. which iz how it makes sense |
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