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Teen Poetry #8

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Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

0 posted 2006-10-20 04:43 PM

forlorn thoughts are all thats left
of my once paradicicle life
i can only sit and stare
down the edge of the knife

lucid and distinct
are the words in my mind
twisted and formed
into a being of life

you stand before me
with these appolagies
but will they bring back
what you took from me

lacerated feelings
from the depths of my soul
you got what you wanted
but at what toll

Renegade
Junior Member

since 2006-10-21

Posts 22

1 posted 2006-10-21 04:57 PM

:'[
I liked it

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2006-10-21 11:54 PM

very strong vocab. added feelings of depth to the poem...
hunnie*

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

3 posted 2006-10-22 04:49 AM

Deep, intense. God you are good.How do you do it? AMazing poems just roll of your tongue. very good poem.

Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

4 posted 2006-10-23 06:47 PM

thanks guys and gals, i read alot and i have a very high vocab, like on the i step or what ever i scored higher than 90% of kids my age in the nation. but yah i guess i just write what i feel.
~Tempest~

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